so excuse me while i pour my heart out to you becuase babydoll it seems like you are the only one that listens nowadays. and the worst thing is, i'm not even sure you do. half drunken bottles of vodka and that distinct smell of smoke engulf your room, and her perfume is all over your sheets. yet, you still persuade me to have sex with you.
why do i always do this ?
i'll cry and promise myself to split up with you, but I never do, why is that?
i love you, oh yes, but don't i hate you more? i always thought i did, but, i think that is starting to change. why do you have to be so godman perfect.
[why am i telling you all this]
i keep asking all these questions, yet, you know the answer to none of them, and you never will know, so, to be honest, its pointless isn't it.
but i'll carry on and i'll try and try because baby you always did that for me, when everyone else left to me to manage on my own, you were there, you were my rock, and baby you will never know how grateful i am to you for that
[all the time expect once.....]
darling you do know i will never let you forget that day don't you.
and you can complain as much as you want, but sweetheart, you should have thought of that before your lips were smothered over hers
[and i bet you can still feel her hands all over you]
but you aren't the only who cheated, you're just the only one who got caught.
and i know you always said you were the more open one in our relationship,
but i'm the one with the open legs...
and don't even bother to pretend like you don't enjoy it
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"but i'll carry on and i'll try and try because baby you always did that for me, when everyone else left to me to manage on my own, you were there, you were my rock, and baby you will never know how grateful i am to you for that
[all the time expect once.....]"
"but you aren't the only who cheated, you're just the only one who got caught.
and i know you always said you were more the more open one in our relationship,
but i'm the one with the open legs..."
These bits were my favourite, although the whole thing was briliant. The first makes it seem like the character is secretive and kinda sad/regretful of something... maybe it's just me :S
Wlell Done,
Keep It Up,
Good Luck In Contest,
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"darling you do know i will never let you forget that day don't you.
and you can complain as much as you want, but sweetheart, you should have thought of that before your lips were smothered over hers
[and i bet you can still feel her hands all over you]
but you aren't the only who cheated, you're just the only one who got caught."
bby;;
you are AMAZING.
I see my competition
You're so beating me right now.
Good luckkkk.
ily.<33
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"but i'll carry on and i'll try and try because baby you always did that for me, when everyone else left to me to manage on my own, you were there, you were my rock, and baby you will never know how grateful i am to you for that
[all the time expect once.....]
darling you do know i will never let you forget that day don't you.
and you can complain as much as you want, but sweetheart, you should have thought of that before your lips were smothered over hers"
"and i know you always said you were more the more open one in our relationship,
but i'm the one with the open legs...
and don't even bother to pretend like you don't enjoy it"
Wow, love those parts.
The whole thing really was good.
Could you please give me your username in your author's comments? Thanks and good luck! ♥
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