Piece by piece
My heart breaks,
searching for anwsers
within the breathless walls,
As I pick up my heartless
companion,
In my mind,
Like a ghost the devil calls
The night grows darker,
As the rivers of
Heaven above fall
down and shower the
hateful world
with love
As the end nears
My stomach chinches in fear,
Pain is pressed into my
Aching skin,
It breaks,
The room spins,
The owls scream,
The moon hides in terror,
My sorrow drips into the
Cracks in the floor
Inhale.
Exhale.
The end.
Author notes
This is about self-harm and what happens
In a list
A contest entry
- contest!!! (no rules) by nobodys-girl.
1700 points, ended July 5, 2007, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - -4 Hours To Enter Your Great Writes in These Categories! Prewrites Welcome! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
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The whole poem is a pack of horror, pain, hatred and fear that the poetess soakes and gathers while living in this world and gives expression with the same verocity as she feelsand faces them. Nice poem, we should be ready to face the hard and bare realities, the poetess can not keep herself in peace until horror, hatred, pain and fear are removed.
Muhammad Shanazar -
"As I pick up my heartless companion" Hello, you've just described a blade.
I luffled it, but it didn't make my wrists bleed! This just isn't strong enough!! I'm not DQ'ing you but it's open to more than one poem per person so if you want to enter more, go for it!!! WOOP!
Bandaid. -
I can sympathetically relate, my friend. My heart breaks more than a glass in a drunken persons hand.
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wow...the ending of this poem left me breathless...it was amazing...thankyou so very much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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You have a strong beginning and great ending to it. I like it all, great work
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Sad write. Powerful imagery in this piece. It's so sad that people harm themselves in this world. Everyone should enjoy life and be happy. I liked the part of showering the world with love the best. It makes me think of what this world needs right now in the world. Just more love and more care. Anyway, great write. Good luck in the contest.
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My sorrow drips into the
Cracks in the floor
Wow .. that is one hell of an image
I like it very much
As much as I resent going back to cutting,
I seriously liked this one.
The ending is perfect (reminds me of my own poem
)
Inhale.
Exhale.
The end.
I'm bookmarking this
If you don't mind.
But, my gosh, word will not explain...
Excellent.
NeveR ♥
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