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Mr Crocodile

Mr Crocodile,
Wont you stop and stay awhile?
I'll light the fire
And tune the radio wire,
Set the table up for three,
Fieldmouse you and me.
Mr Crocodile, what is that you're doing?
Is it your mind that you are losing!?
I was told that you were vegetarian,
Now I see you're just a cruel barbarian!
I didn't have this dish in mind for tea,
Please, Mr Crocodile, don't eat me!

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I didn't know quite what you wanted so I just went with the basic theme.

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  • Pocket
    June 2, 2007

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    Haha... I've just been reading your sadder, more emotional poems and this certainly added some humourous diversity to your collection. I love that you've still managed to keep your trademark whimsical darkness, though.


  • BloodyCrystalEmbers
    May 30, 2007
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    I loved this Marzi,it showed your humorous side,It is so cute...I could picture it as well,and oddly enough it took me back to when I was a little girl reading poems and stories in my childcraft series lol,great imagery my dear and flow you never disappoint me...


  • Envelope
    May 29, 2007

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    lol i wanted anything creative, and this was definately along those lines, it was simple, clever, and amusing. I liked it alot great job lol


  • HorrorFiend
    May 28, 2007
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    Wow, that was really amusing! Very creative and I enjoyed reading it, it made me smile.

  • marmel
    May 28, 2007

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    Listen!

    I have read many of those books filled with cute and random short stories and poems, and quite frankly I could open one and picture this being right in it. I strongly recommend you trying to write a few more, or if you want, just trying to get this published. Cute and imaginative, it would really work perfectly in one of those quirky children's book! PLease comment on my poem too.
    AWESOME!


  • redradical
    May 28, 2007

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    I really loved this. I actually pictured it in my head as a cartoon or a little girl's tea party. Funny read.


  • PatheticKt
    May 28, 2007

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    wee! what a poem that is cute yet has a moral lesson in it (i think?) anyway, this poem's simply nice! woo!


    • Marzipan
      May 28, 2007
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      Moral lesson? Care to elaborate? I didn't intend one but it's cool if you can find it.

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