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Insanity

Missing image

I spy with my beady little eye,

the vortex of human emotion,

vibrantly bold with intensity,

a manic maelstrom of commotion.


My thoughts are spinning out of control,

like a hurricane invading land,

right now there is not one lucid thought,

my minds on fire like the desert sand.


Left alone with masquerading thoughts,

confusion lavished upon my soul,

around and round in circles I go,

stuck in the whirlwind without a goal.

Voracious and not to be denied,

such the appetite for destruction,

quite insatiable I shall remain,

insanity needs no instruction...

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 31, 2007

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    Very good

    This is excellent. How utterly wonderful and amazing to read. Wonderful work. ~Pamela


  • Sandygram silver member
    May 28, 2007

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    Wonderful Poem

    CONGRATULATIONS Frogster!!! Your poem was wonderful and so deserved the Gold. Great imagery and went great with the picture. You take care. Sandy


  • Quiet places
    May 28, 2007
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    Thank you for your entry

    Excellent, Don


  • Legend silver member
    May 28, 2007

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    Frog strangely this image does have manic look about it One can see where such a piece gravitated from your pen.The words convey the feeling one gets when starring into the picture A fine poem Good luck in the contest


  • Jadon
    May 28, 2007

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    A ride! Dizzy!...must....sit,,,,,,!

    No idea why I should be smiling, but I am. Delight, I suspect. (My delight relates to how well you did. A little clarification) The title and the first line whetted my appetite to see what you might have to say. Strangely I do have personal experience with mental illness, just not my own, and I would say you got it right. Another life I have observed and wondered about.
    You brought your environment into the poem with "like a hurricane invading land". Perfect image of an unstoppable force. I liked each line for what it contributed and I feel that you did not hold back in putting your energy into going beneath the surface on this topic.
    "manic maelstrom", your third verse were among my favorites, that concluding line a master stroke to this poem.
    Thanks Frogzter for such a well done morning read. Jadon


  • Lady-Pegasus
    May 27, 2007

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    Very nice piece with a beautiful touch of alliteriation. The imagery is as fascinating as the picture, which compliments the write wonderfully! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e


  • non-conformist
    May 27, 2007

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    Yes this is GREAT

    I love it. Hey! you need to put this in the Book. send me an IM and I will give you the link.
    Love and blessings
    Non


  • candy-coated-razors
    May 27, 2007
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    i love it very unique! Good luck!


  • Frozentearz
    May 27, 2007

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    Phew you got that right insanity needs no intructions indeed it just happens, sigh.. I see you used the word
    maelstrom great usage of it, oh how I know the conflicting words within this poem at times, Sometimes it sure feels like we will come unglued, but somehow we stay on that thin line of Sanity,
    Big hugz your way.
    TEarz

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