I'm spiraling downward,
My mind is filled with heavy thoughts,
Every time I ask for help,
My family says I'm just fine,
Please someone help me,
Try to escape myself,
You all don't understand me,
I wish I could tell you how I feel,
Nope I can't no one wants to listen,
So I exclude myself,
I just go and sit in my room,
Dumb is what I'm called now so,
Empty I will forever be...
Author notes
If you look at the first letter in every line it spells out "I'm Empty Inside"
A contest entry
- Thoughts & Feelings (picture inspired) by Quiet places.
600 points, ended May 28, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this was a very good piece. nearly confusing just a TAD tad little bitty bit here and there but over-all a grand write that you should be proud of! it makes me think you need a hug
lol! 
a sweet write!
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you have never asked me to listen, i would eny time you need to talk let me know! love aunt donna
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stand Tall
Young lady the world can be cruel at times & people so indifferent. But you hace a reason & a cause to stand tall for you are a poet. write away
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My favorite parts are.... Drum roll plz.
Understand Me Now?
I'm spiraling downward,
My mind is filled with heavy thoughts,
Every time I ask for help,
My family says I'm just fine,
Please someone help me,
Try to escape myself,
You all don't understand me,
I wish I could tell you how I feel,
Nope I can't no one wants to listen,
So I exclude myself,
I just go and sit in my room,
Dumb is what I'm called now so,
Empty I will forever be...
Pretty much the whole thing! -
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thx lol love you mom!
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I love it Steph, and like your mom, I'll always be here for you. ! L0V3 Y0(_)!!!
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Ya kid I like ya too,
I just NAILED steh between the eyes!!!!!
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Dearest Daughter
I wish I could tell you how I feel,
Nope I can't no one wants to listen,
So I exclude myself,
I just go and sit in my room,
Dumb is what I'm called now so,
Empty I will forever be...
I promise you that I will always be here for you to talk to, I know I screwed up in the past, I am sorry.
I love you, and I am so proud of who you are, your writing is beautiful.
As are you.
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Thank you for your entry
Very creative write, Don -
Wow, this is good. I didn't even notice it was an acrostic. (Which is a good thing.)
I've felt this way before, and it'll pass. You just have to keep your head up and stay strong and things will get better.
Have a wonderful day and good luck in the contest,
FallenPoeticAngel -
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thank you for your kind words!
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