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the Century’S Child



My nativity my parents repent
For it interferes with their fecund fun.
In liquescent lust
The dissipated dissolutes
Pair up afresh
For passing pleasures.
No bond endures
Save their lewd licence
Like rabid dogs
And bitches in heat
Locking less than the duration of dogs.
Wasting their seeds
Neither they gather nor garner
Nor do they lay up some straw
In their temporary shed
For me to incubate
And the Magi consider it madness
To follow the orient star
That heralds my accidental birth
As if I was not the king to be
But a bastard burdensome.

The roofs and props
Put up once by some fools
Have now become a tower
Where confusion reigns
That maddens and urges
An avenger insane
To pull down the rotten structure
And set up a city on the plain
Not to preserve the seed
But in the dead of an endless night
To please all passers by
Visiting our quarters
To know our sisters—
Those painted harlots seeking freedom—
And without waiting for a fire from heaven
We aid and abet a conflagration
To engulf all laughing bastards
Enabling none to rise from the dead
Or lay down his life
On a cross futile
And wash away with his blood
The festers of this leprous world.
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  • flounder416
    February 13

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    Unique

    Excellent job! I really like the way you use words. Thank you for your entry and I wish you the best of luck!

  • Luciferschild
    January 10

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    the poem is a bit boring but besides that i do think that it carries some potential, thank you for entering and good luck

  • Mirabelle-Daisy
    January 6
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    Excellent work!
    Thank you for entering my contest!!

  • uppercasespeakers
    January 1
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    good... well done. thanks.

  • redhanded
    December 22, 2008

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    very nice write you have here, thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in this contest and in the future
    andi
    (redhanded)

  • nature
    December 10, 2008

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    Wow!

    What a mixed bag of punches smashing through this treacherous and ‘leprous world’. And to think the century has just began….. Thanks for entering the contest.


  • angela.
    December 4, 2008
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    Very good.
    =]
    best of luck.


  • redhanded
    December 4, 2008
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    i really liked this piece thanks so much for your entry it was penned very well best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
    andi
    (redhanded)

  • gotmunchies
    November 24, 2008
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    Great

    that was a really cool reading
    haha
    I love it.

  • DramaQueen469 Greeters member
    October 23, 2008

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    Wow.

    That's all... just... wow.

    Thankyou VERY much for entering this, and good luck.

    ~*~DramaQueen469~*~

  • Perfect-Pain
    October 22, 2008
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    Thanks soooo much for entering. This is just the sort of thing that I was looking for.

  • Lsh-x
    August 11, 2008
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    great choice of words, and the passion given is amazing.

    Good luck, and well done

  • KayJay
    June 23, 2008

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    Wow... such a sense of rage in your words... Your voice is passionate, your words - at times obscure - penetrating, and you images vivid. I can see your passion here and the mad beauty of your offering...
    Both disturbing and lovely...

    From a critical viewpoint (you didn't think I was going to let you off easy did you?) and just my opinion... Your choice of language while beautiful makes it difficult to follow since I'm constantly having to translate into my common language... I don't think that you should change anything... it is your vision and your voice... just be aware that many readers won't stick around when challenged to use their brains (LOL).

    I think this is a great work just from the honesty here... Thank you for sharing...Truely, this is what I was hoping for... and it's unappreciated no longer.

    Ken

  • TheDemonEve
    May 9, 2008

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    I for one think your use of words is eloquent and well chosen. The emotional content in this piece blew me away as well. Very nicely done.

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!


  • nightshade10
    December 19, 2007

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    This is a very powerful, intersting write. I know what it's like to be an accident, and it's certainly difficult.

    My one big criticism, however, is that it is overly wordy in parts. For example, in the first few lines it feels almost as if you're just trying to throw as many big, unusual words in as possible to sound impressive. I think that your topic is powerful enough on it's own, it doesn't need all of those flourishes.

    I guess I've always been a fan of poets that can express complicated, beautiful emotions through simplicity and sparseness.

    Thank you very much, however, for entering this in my contest.
    • karabi
      December 19, 2007
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      nightshade 10

      Not a single word is redundant here. The whole poem reverberates with ideas, images and expressions from the Bible. To understand its message one has to read the Bible more closely - the New Testament for the first stanza and the Old Testament for the final stanza. It took me more than six months to write this poem after several close study of that great book which human genius has produced.

  • Tangled Angle
    July 21, 2007

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    Hey, thank you for entering, however I don’t think this poem will win in my contest, therefore I am going to remove it. This is nothing personal at all, by doing this, I can also stay organized with judging.
    Again, thank you for entering.

    Also, I usually would give constructive criticism, but there are lots of entries, and I just don’t have the time. In my other contests though, if you do know me, you know I always give constructive comments when necessary. Just this time, it’s too time consuming. lol

  • left
    July 20, 2007

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    Yes, man is a sad being often. An insult to creation, a mockery to intelligence and a shame to life. The set up of the huge universal maze of lies however, is so overwhelmingly powerful and successful in keeping ignorance in place that it is no wonder that most will never be able to figure out why they are here and what is expected of them. They simply believe all the crap that is persistently rammed down their throats and think it is true. As a result most are full of it. It explains the sorry state of this planet. Many have no excuse whatsoever for cluttering it up. Fortunately beyond the embarrassing lack of wit of mankind there are a number of entities who actually do know why we are here and what the purpose of us being here is. Without it we'd all be goners. Thank you for creating and sharing this accurately cynical expression. Take care,

    U

  • Angels Delight
    June 6, 2007
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    INTENSE

    My Fellow Poet...

    You have rendered me speechless...This poem was so sad and yet it has a powerful message...that is the makings of a brilliant poem...

    Thank you so much for entering my contest and I do wish you the best of luck

    Much Love
    Tessa

  • Angel of Musik
    May 29, 2007

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    That was...painful. I'm not sure it it made me mad or depressed...but either way you got a rise out of me.

    Very well done, thank you.
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