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Look at me....

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Here I stand in front of you
Please look at me and tell me
while you watch me silently.
Can you see the pain in my eyes?
Are my lips still speaking the same?
Or do you hear the hurt in my voice
when I explain how I feel
Are your eyes watching me
and counting the unseen tears?
Do I look the same to you,
while you watch me collapse?
Perhaps you see all the cry’s
that marked my face,
with scars from the inside
After all these years
did I changed?
Can you tell me?
Please look at me!

Is it still the same me?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

This is a write for the Titles Challenge Group

Mirror Mirror

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A contest entry

Can you tell me is it still me?

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  • Ignis Corpus
    July 19, 2007

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    After all these years
    did I changed?
    Can you tell me?
    Please look at me!

    Is it still the same me? loved those lines, good job and i wish you the bset of luck in this contest
    beautifuldisasterx


  • lisargh
    May 31, 2007

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    This is a fantastic poem, I think to make the wonderful words here stand out more, you could lose the 'ands' that are in it, great poem though
    Lisa


  • FifthDove
    May 31, 2007

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    This is sad yet so relatable (sadly) I hope things get better soon for you and the hurt fades into memory. Best wishes to youDove


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    May 28, 2007

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    We may can cover outward scars and hide the ones inside, but the eyes are the windows to the soul. You have used your pain to complete this challenge well. I think this is a good tool to help you heal. Well done sweet lady!

    Jeannie


  • Ethereal One gold member
    May 27, 2007

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    excellent!

    You really express how it is to hurt so bad on the inside, and how it may not be visable on the outside. Such sadness usually can be seen in the eyes. I know you have been hurt deeply, but I also know that it is these experiences that make us ready for a new, deeper love in our lives.

    Best wishes in the contest my friend!

    Aurora 2012


    • Wolf Mistress silver member
      May 28, 2007
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      Well it's a bit of a make it up here I am in this group where we have 7 titles each week..and I just can't follow these guy's all up so I have to write and write and write....till I drop
      Maybe you should join us too

      But you are right, sadness is shown in the eyes....
      XXJeannette

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