When they're little,
they're perfect.
They can be anything they want to be;
a fairy, a goddess, a princess, beautiful.
But then, they grow up a bit,
and the world tells them no.
No, you can't be a fairy,
fairies don't exist.
So they cry and hang up the little fairy wings.
And then, they get older,
and the world tells them no.
No, you can't be a goddess,
you're no better than anyone else.
So they frown and pull the white flowers from their hair.
A few years later,
and the world tells them no.
No, you can't be a princess,
you're not good enough.
So they sigh and throw away the glass slippers and plastic crowns.
Now they're in high school,
and the world tells them no.
No, you can't be beautiful,
only those girls are.
So they shrug and put on the bright lipstick and dark eye liner.
And when it seems like there's nothing left to say,
the world tells them no.
No, you're doing it wrong.
Why don't you make something of yourself?
You should feel like a fairy, a goddess, a princess, beautiful.
But it's too late,
beacause the world told them no.
A contest entry
- Worthy? by shirk.
500 points, ended June 2, 2007, 22 entries
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I like the idea but not so much the form or the word choice.
You have a nice theme as I said, but the words you use...You repeat a lot...Such a princess fairies...you don't need to go back and rehash something you already said. "you should feel like a fairy, a goddess, a princess; beautiful" is fine, but then you don't need to go back and say "Because fairies..." "Goddesshood" "Being a princess" It's just...I dunno. You can do better, I feel.
I'd like you to edit and change a few of these things?
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How's this; "But it's too late, because the world told them no."
It's a simple way of fixing the problem. I think I actually had it like that originally, but I changed it for some reason. I don't remember why now...
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this poem is so beautifully, and sadly true. the world is such a hurtfull and just ugly place, not naturally but because we make it that way. awesome write!
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Thanks.
i have two other poems a lot like this one because I get so frustrated by the world's double standards. it drives me insane.
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