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I live to love and love to live, with my heart and body I willingly give.
For one kiss missed is forever lost, but wasted Love the resultant cost.
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Code for Life Contest in 2 to 3 lines.
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In a list
A contest entry
- I Want Your Lifes' Motto In Five Lines Or Less by 2lullabyhaven.
600 points, ended June 10, 2007, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 2 or 3 lines ONLY ANYTHING GOES! by Florida Sunshine.
450 points, ended June 24, 2007, 113 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - more quickie prewrites please by DancingRed.
300 points, ended July 14, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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short and sweet
This is beautiful in all its shortness.. I really like it.. you say so much in so little. -
well said. all we need is love
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Powerfully said. The internal rhyme is stellar. Perhaps it could have been set out differently - in four lines instead of two. But I understand it was specifically written for another contest, so never mind about that.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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It's a TERRIFIC WRITE! How romantic of thoughts! I really enjoyed it (However, I know we are in a shared contest~but mine is 2 or 3 lines ~ not sentences... I realize its only one sentence in 4 lines... if you can adjust a tad I'd be happy to re-view the write.) ~ Thanks so much for entering my contest!!!
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Incorrectly arranged.
Thanks for bringing that to my intention. Actually the original version has been resubmitted which I cut up into 4 lines for that other contest. Now it is reworded as originally written and in two lines which I believe is smoother and the meaning much better with more impact now.
Barry -
Malicai
Yes, I see what you mean. I did not realise what i had done when I cut and pasted it but have edited it to comply properly. Sorry about that.
Bazza
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nice
simply short, and nice.. i live to love and love to live! powerful meaning..
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Dear Bazza
Spoken and expressed like a true lover. Kudos on a great write.
Peace and love,
Petratani
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Stuffups galore
I was happy with this one myself but that is one advantage of my age .. been there done that .. Wisdom is quite expensive to learn at times lol I should have tons of it with all my stuffups.Barry
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If only we all saw life with such simplicity as it really is, the world would be full of much happier people! I adore this one, short as it is...wonderful work BrudderBaz...marvelous indeed!!
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One kiss missed is forever lost Thats a line I will used when this frog needs a princess to kiss. An wonderful little piece Bazza Good luck in the contest
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Well, I can only say this::: I LOVE THIS!!!
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Live to love.
Thought you might like it ... thanks for the wonderful review and applause.
Barry
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Flowers.
Please tell me what those beautiful blue flowers are on your avatar.
Barry -
Poetically, the first 4 lines a superb together. The final line seems a bit off, though it may be important for your personal motto.
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Lopsided.
The problem mainly is because most contest holders specify odd numbers of lines (why? I don't know) which gives a lopsided rhyme pattern and really buggars up the flow too. If I had two lines instead of just the last one I could have expressed it much more easily, but the crux of the matter (in my personal case) is to consider other people's feelings too, so there was a limit to what I could say. One must love oneself as well as others otherwise hypocrisy becomes rampant. Only had 5 minutes to write this but it may get tweaked when I have more time. To sum up, I agree with you and if I get the time, will do what I can. Thankyou for the lovely comments and applause.
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The contest stipulates 5 lines or less, I believe.
So you'd within the rules to shorten it.
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Well penned
There's just a few things I would just love to add to this one...lol..."Ensure loved ones are never crossed"?
I think the first order of the day, just my humble opinion now, is that one should love themselves, cause if you don't learn and develope etc, in this crucial
area, the hope of loving your families and anybody else is just not even on the table, in fact it is a non or a not even happening thing. So if I had the permission to alter your piece, well I would say ---
Ensure that you don't double cross yourself, you know,
like in your sleep (hehehehe) the part of yourself that hates yourself ends up attacking yourself and the evil part of you gains territory and over comes and over powers the balance of you rendering you dead or severely incompacitated. So this is a good motto.
But you must be the first partaker of the love you wish
to heap upon others. smile and lol thank you for your
entry into this my first contest.
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hi my dear daddy
A very great beginning followed by nice lines.
Wish you the best luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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