The wind is whistling through the trees on this day
Sunlight breathes gently down upon our anxious bodies
As we wait, and wait, for her to call out
The wait sends chills down my spine, when suddenly
A yip is heard from the darkness of the den
She has done her duty and peeked out, to summon me
Her beautiful amber eyes sparkled as she lead me down
Into the ground where her scent fills the air
Two gorgeous newborn wolf pups laid huddled in the dirt
Nuzzling the ground and whimpering softly
Their miniature bodies curled against each other gently
The little bundles of fur gleamed with silver and black imprints
Theif faces, deeply wrinkled around their shut eyes
While their stubby tails wagged with joy
How could something so small, be so beautiful?
She lays down beside her pups, exposing her warmth
And within a second the pups scramble over one another
Moving their legs ever so slightly to reach her underbelly
They guzzled down their soft food greedily, whimpering as they did
I laid down beside her comfortably, licking her muzzle
What a job she had done, what strong pups we have
The pack has grown and now with new offspring
Our summer shall once more come with new surprises
Author notes
Animal of Choice: WOLF
A contest entry
- ~A Token of How Much I Love You...~ by And Hyetal.
600 points, ended June 27, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - animal changing by leo wings.
425 points, ended January 26, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
^.^ I love my wolves, check out my newest chapter of "Leader" for more wolves lol
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In line 16 there is a most serious grammatical error. The word "lays" should be "lies" as "to lay" is transitive - I am constantly horrified that schools do not teach the difference between these two verbs. Possibly the so-called teachers do not know themselves. Things were different in Transylvania.
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This is a pretty cool poem! thanks for entering
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Nice Work
Hi poetess thanks for your kind comments on my poem. I thought it would be fun to check out your poetry.
This poem is my favourite because it has a nice strong subject and you’ve tackled it in an interesting way through the eyes of the cubs’ father. You’ve used plenty of descriptive language to describe the cubs and worked hard to make this an interesting read. If asked for advice I’d say throw in a few stronger words, wolves are rough tough proud animals.
I hope you keep up the writing because poetry is more than words, it’s the joy of ideas and free thought.
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Well done on a great write with this one, lovely imagery
Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen -
Incredible job!! I love the how you made me visualize the den, the pups, and the mother... Very, very good!!!
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!!! Wow! This was so sweet! Okay, I have a thing for little cute baby animals AND love poetry, and this had both! It shows the caring nature of wolves (the mother for her babies and her mate for her). I love this, and I definately want to read more! (What's your screen name, since this is an anonymous contest?
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Great work, thank you for entering my contest, and good luck!
Always,
Cassie
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