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Silent Tomb

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Silent Tomb

She is locked in a silent tomb
And society has no room
With ears that can not hear a sound
Yet her world is quite profound

And society has no room
At times she is taken to gloom
But what the people fail to see
Is lack of hearing set her free

At times she is taken to gloom
Ignorance, the people assume
Yet she has a mind of her own
I love her so, she’s not alone

Ignorance, the people assume
Yet she can hear a flower bloom
She’s saved from all the nasty noise
Creative thought that sound destroys

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Dedicated to my friend Lane

Retourne
Like so many other French forms, the retourne is all about repetition. It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas), and each line has eight syllables. The trick is that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes do not have to rhyme.
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  • Swan song gold member
    June 3, 2007

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    Wow! a differnt twist to a retourne. This was very nice. Nice rhyme nice cadnece and everything. you out did yourself again!


  • x Gemini x
    May 31, 2007

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    Thank you for entering my contest.

    Short, sweet and simple.

    Good imagery. Nice flow. Postive message/

    Job well done


  • Laura
    May 30, 2007

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    this is beautiful, the rhyme is utterly amazing producing excellent imagery totally igniting the poem very well done to you love xxx


  • Desire gold member
    May 29, 2007

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    Wow!!

    This is Precious!!
    Beautiful verse You have penned for a Precious Spirit also~
    Love reading these pieces You pen!!
    You bring forth Your Heart and let Spirit guide!
    Loved it!!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Whoochi gold member
    May 28, 2007

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    Oh Dollface...this almost made me cry! Lane, is such a kindred siter to me, am sure we have met in another time and place...and you are so true, I do sign language to the hearing impaired in my church for the worship part, and to be able to "feel" the words and worship is awesome...How you penned she can hear a flower bloom is exactly right on! Good job...As usual, always teaching me and al;ways learning from you! Love ya tons...am sure Lane treasures this!


  • PerVirtuous
    May 27, 2007
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    More sweetness. I love it. Keep up the great work. You may light the entire world. Three bunnies.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 27, 2007

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    Amera,

    Actually, by far, the best poem I have seen done for Lane. Absolutely the best by far, from your heart and that is what makes it so much better. bravo gal, bravo.

    *rose8

    Dad


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 27, 2007

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    Oh, my sweet little bird...you have taken me, given me wings, and let me fly with you. How can I ever tell you what this poem means to me? I can only ask that you hold me close and listen to my heart....Lane


  • FallingTwilight
    May 27, 2007

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    I think my favorite stanza is the last.Honestly, your poetry never ceases to amaze me Amera.

    Good luck in the contest and have a beautiful day,

    FallenPoeticAngel


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 27, 2007

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    Another classic form written extremely well and a beautiful tribute to Lane, I'm sure she'll love this! Thank you for sharing. Love you millions. Laura

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