Meadow blows in mind to petal,
wand to wave her earthen stars,
so I step softly through her lace,
to see what I might know of beauty, blushed
in journey's wish, to bare me naked.
A contest entry
- I Want Your Lifes' Motto In Five Lines Or Less by 2lullabyhaven.
600 points, ended June 10, 2007, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 5 of 5
-
This is an interesting mott
Sometimes so hard to be out from hiding in the bushes
Beautiful
-
This is a beautiful piece, I am having a slight issue.
I am hoping that I am not too far in my interpretation
of certain aspects of it...for example-"to bare me naked" now I see this as perhaps saying that you want
to be transparent...open and honest, even when it hurts
Am I far off on this or close to what you intend?
I will revisit this one.
-
-
Yes...you understood that perfectly...without pretense
-
-
such a beautiful thought to wake up to on a sunday morning's brighter rise of fresher step in journey wished.
-
hehehe well five actual lines is strictly speaking not under five lines, four lines and below is under five lines.
Adding your comment:
1 - 5 of 5
