So I find myself lost again.
Needing a close friend.
To help me though the pain.
But I can't help but restrain.
The feelings I have inside.
The ones I try so hard to hide.
The sorrows and hardships I been though.
Asking anybody what do I do.
But it is like I am all alone.
Seeking the way just needing to be shown.
Walking away would be the easy way out.
I wanna scream I wanna shout.
If I could get this off of my chest.
I could finally put this to rest.
And move on with my life.
Without holding the knife.
I could be free again.
Maybe then could I have a friend.
To be by my side.
We would have nothing to hide.
I would be able to smile.
Without all the nonsense denile.
I would see the light.
And not feel so alone at night.
I would not have to be nobody but me.
I could look though my eye's and see.
That it is all the past.
I would be first not last.
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Wow, this poem had a nice flow to it. The part that stuck out the most was
But I can't help but restrain.
The feelings I have inside.
The ones I try so hard to hide.
Keep up the good work.
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aaaaaaah, this is so sad... Everyone needs a friend! I'm new here I'd be your friend. You can never have enough friends.
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Wow. Great rhyme and rhythm. I've felt this way too. In fact, I still kind of do. I love the powerful message of hope toward the end. Thanks for sharing with the group!
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nice! a rhythmic poem...i love this poem...it actually explains about how i feel...so,i was deeply touched when i read the poem...g8 job
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Interesting poem. Thank you for entering my contest.
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postively interresting. good job.
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nicely done i like it good luck with the contest
nightmare xx
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These lines stood out for me:
I would not have to be nobody but me.
I could look though my eye's and see.
That it is all the past.
I would be first not last.
You can believe that is true. You write such wonderful words and must see how truthful they are. Take them to heart. I love your work.
Peace and love,
Petratani
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Very Powerful piece!
Powerful emotion flows from your pen!! Longing to be loved for who we are not who someone wants us to be is a universal feeling. You have a great way with sharing emotion!!
Shannon
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Awsome!
Hey thanks for posting this on the SEGA reading list thing. It flows great. Similer feelings to my own. Very well articulated 3 clapses!
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Such words of deep need and very well penned...To be loved for ones self is a great honor and a good friend is more precious than gold
wonderful play on words thank you so much for sharing.
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I'm really in love with this one.
It's very honest. -
Meaningful
I enjoyed this very much. It's very honest. You let a guard down here and I imagine a man with his head in his hands somewhere in a forest..just whispering to himself, trying to get his head straight. Again, I see military term used. It might be your forte.
In this poem, you are "keeping it real".
S
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