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Tragedy-seeming a life story

Banned from the house barred out again
Kicked out by my mother, abandoned by my dad
For a man or women they've never really had

I'd sit alone carving away
just to live another day

Suicidal tendencies, friends who hurt the most
Yet I write a sad poem to replace the beaten post
The post that they have made me into day by day
When they all told me to give my emotions away

Losing the love of your life to whom doesn't care
To look at the chains around your neck [hope for a dare]
To see yourself as a tragedy made for the purpose to cry
To wish that everyone would just let you die

Teenagers over power the world of tears
Teenagers wish  to hold some one near

Teenagers like me never have a wish come true
Its just not something easy for a loner to do
The teenager that I am today
Has lost her parents in such cruel ways

A fake step dad who's never home
An evil step mom who wants happiness for HER kids alone
A pilot step dad who flew away from his own kids
A step mom that crawls under every ones skin

A sister I cared for who walked away from me
As the rest of them have let me see
A brother I love oh so much
Who lives 1300 miles from his sisters touch

A brother I hate for what hes done to me in the past
leaving a mark that put me in last
A fake home covered by unremarkable lies
Institutionalized because of my bloody cries

I longed for a family that could show a hint of affection
The wires never met, I never glimpsed a connection

So as I write about my tragedies, I remember why,
Why I wanted so bad to write this down and not to cry

Author notes

option 1b



It's long but it flowed so many memories I thought I blocked out or erased... some I didnt dare to get into so i focused on my most recent ones....


"I'm sorry"


PLEASE TAKE OUT IF NOT GOOD ENOUGH



Lycan lore, wholesome whore, breatheren bred, bloody bed!

dazedXdesires


OPTION 4::_
pain. prewrites allowed. No tactless pieces "I am in so much pain because you hate me" no blond stating it please. I want to feel it, be you

It may not seem like pain to you, but its pain to me

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Comments

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  • killshort
    May 27, 2008

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    this was amazing...you projected your pain so that everyone could feel it...I would be glad to have you as a family member...please just let me know which you would like to be


  • ShadowsMidnightRose
    January 26, 2008

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    This is perfect, i can feel your pain. It also made easier for other's to understand your pain, and suffering. YOu did very well!
    Thank you for entering my contest, good luc


  • Dalawa
    August 24, 2007

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    Very nicely written. The pain of memories you can't get rid of is the worst. The last two lines make a great ending, and the title's great too.
    Nice job, and best of luck!


  • stop a bullet
    August 6, 2007

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    A very well written piece. there is so much pain and emotion flowing from the words.. it really pulls you in and you can't pull yourself out.. great job.. thanks for entering the follow-up. good luck!

    }{aley


  • Puppydog gold member
    June 8, 2007

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    DEEP FROM THE HEART

    I feel we all have had our pain and sorrows and have delt with them. It is never easy to be alone , I have been pretty much alone for most of my life. I sometimes want to be near someone but mostly cherish my quiet time alone.

  • CrazyRebel
    June 1, 2007
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    Wow, its a really sad and emotional poem. Very beautifully written.


  • romanticadventure
    June 1, 2007

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    This poem has alot going on, but i understand why you chose to write almost a list of teenage problems. The rhymes are well put together, you also have a strong vocabulary good job.


  • MagazinesFall
    May 28, 2007
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    the beginning was a bit slow but the middle/end was an amazing write!
    Good Luck in the contest!


  • angelstheory1.0
    May 27, 2007

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    I just am soo touched by this poem.. I hope this doesnt happen to you. I know it happens alot to many people.. Which is sad to have the sense of loniness there when your family obviously does care. [[hey look that rhymed! xD]] The title gives you a great idea of what the poem is about but the 1st verse has so much of an impact!

    And then the last two lines.. they really are the finishing touches.

    Alot of people can relate to this.. and the feelings are raw

    keep it up!

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