her lips are glossed and perfect
around the words,
photogenic as popularity and assurance
round like pills, she shapes air bitter
with burn-in-hell denunciations
perfectly reasonable flames
against wicker voodoo-dolls
shaped like wedding-cake,
both of the grooms
clad in black
and I want
to hand-drag her, mouth hemp-bound,
past Richard and Sandra and Andrew,
genius oboist dart-quick with quips
show her Jenny&Lara as they fumble-part-meet
always with smiles, best friends
throughout
until wickerwork screams
with their hearts and their voices
and she sees-tastes-feels
~exactly~
what she
would condemn
Author notes
For Teen Idol, a poem 'bashing' something you hate - in this case, homophobia. And bigots in general, come to that.
A contest entry
- Raven Qualifier - Culture: Religion, Society and Politics by Raven Contest.
450 points, ended August 1, 2007, 84 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Tolerance is something this world is desperate for.
Whether it be for skin color, faith, or sexual orientation...or any of the other things that gives this earth its wonderful diversity. And diversity is the key to harmony; but only when tolerance replaces hate. Congrats on this write with such a powerful voice. Best to you in your pursuits. Blue
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Oh yeah.... 88.
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Title: 10/10
Length suits piece: 15/15
Personal connection: 15/15
Rant content: 15/15
Poetic quality is maintained: 17/20
Spelling/ Grammar: 6/10
Creativity: 10/10
Effort: 5/5
Okay, so your grammar made me take off points. But man, overall I loved this. I hope you know that this is my favorite, and I'm not going to avoid saying that. I'm glad you did this topic. -
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Straight to the point and in your face, I like this. I feel the more recent challenges in Teen Idol have brought our your personality more, and your poems have had a unique edge because of that.
I enjoyed this, and I hate homophobia too.
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Very well expressed the world views with passion and a fire. The wording was brilliant. You took a broad topic and narrow it down.
and she sees-tastes-feels
~exactly~
what she
would condemn
I feel this was wrote very well. It reveals the truth in the world today. Many are quick to put someone in a box. It not right right. Very well done. Very creative work. -
Wonderful!
This is a FANTASTIC entry to Teen Idol (I'm in for trouble!)
This is so strong and so powerful
The thing you have chosen is so difficult as it is a HUGE thing to write about and you tackled it really well and caught it perfectly
It was so clever the way you did it and every device that was asked for you mastered in perfect glory
Well done
Good luck
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