The dream said:
“He assumed everyone wanted to make love to him.
I have two Canadians.
The gay guy killed his lover,”
Though this last was not too clear.
Another tale,
A strange insolvent tale,
A tale from beneath the stair.
A tale of ghosts and goblins.
Of last thoughts as we sleep,
And portents in the air.
Of Death, and Fortune lost
Of dear and lovely faces.
Such mists as these are better left alone;
Not told on some bitter summers eve.
Best wait for winter’s heavy chill
When frost begins to clamber up the windowsill.
Author notes
Of recollection before coffee...washes...
it clean.
Written August 2nd, 2003
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I think you've lost me here, Lute. I'm probably way off base, but this reads like a collection of snippets, incoherent bits and pieces snatches of news, memories, dreams - is this the precaffiene moment, or the post caffiene buzz? I did enjoy the latter 2 verses, a bit Brothers Grimm, stuff of dreams, stuff of nightmares - it leaves one thinking, but I have the nagging feeling I've missed the larger picture here?...
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I liked this Lute, this is a quirky and entertaining piece...but also somewhat disturbed, your dream darkening as we move through the poem..of memories that owe a debt, but are unable to pay...and then your determination to push them away - save such dark thoughts for more stormy days.
"The gay guy killed his lover,”
Though this last was not too clear"
Structured just like a dream - somewhat disjointed by overly cohesive. Made for interesting reading.
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Wow, this is awesome. Sort of a bizarro surreal dream treat!
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awesome
Love this. Puts me in the dream state. *perks up* "coffee time!
Keep Feelin' Fascination,
~Tiffany~ -
"Such mists as these are better left alone; " before coffee? :-)
me... bed... coffee pot... cigarette...coffee pot...cigarette... turn computer on... coffee pot... cigarette... look at blinding monitor... cigarette...open wordprocessor... coffee pot... cigarette... wait for poem :-)
That middle stanza is awesome...
Enjoyed this,
~ Wendy
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