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Ghost Ship

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Ghost Ship

The feeling was light in the musty air
A darkened fright as I looked at my hand
Sentenced to linger on this floating lair
Choking my finger; the gold wedding band

My father forced me by the holy book
To go to sea when ‘ere this man would call
A mariners’ wife and the ghost ship cook
My sentenced life, with no freedom at all

The crew played dice, cast lots sure enough
No wedding rice, I’m a prearranged wife
I’m a specters’ whore and ships powder puff
So that is my chore on this ghost ship life

When the crew had died, we were cast to sea
I was torn inside, not enough of me

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Internal rhyme: aabb – External rhyme: abab

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  • Knight70 silver member
    June 3

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    haunting sonnet that I will remember...

    I love to read ghost stories, so this hit the spot for me. I love the visual you created here, with the obvious regret from a prearranged wife.

  • Purrsanthema
    February 18

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    Very much fun! As I grew up near the Great Lakes and am old enough to remember the song "The Wreck of the Edmund Fitzgerald" I have always been fascinated with ghost ships and wrecks of all kinds. In line 11, is there supposed to be an apostrophe in ship's? Like that? I think so, I assume the typo piskey gotcha!

  • Eusebius
    July 23, 2007

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    bravo

    A neat and nifty sonnet--I LOVE ghost ships--a new spin on an old theme...well done! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • tender-butterfly
    June 4, 2007

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    Lovely

    Wow this is really an impressive piece of poetry.
    I am please to see that you have created this from my list of words. You also show a great deal of effort with respect to the rhyming attempt.

    I must say that your piece of poetry has made me happy to see writing like this present in my contest.

    Good luck.

    tender-butterfly


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 1, 2007

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    WELL OK THEN

    This is a wonderful story you have penned...so well thought out and arranged...Really holds the interest I see a shiny gold trophy here Excellent! thank you so much for sharingCooland just loved the picture!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    May 27, 2007
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    Superb

    Nice creativity in the story line. The poem of course, excellent.
    Buddy


  • Desire gold member
    May 27, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Aaaaaaaaaaaw Danggggggggg You are so good at these forms~ Form Queen!!
    Love the story You told and it just flowed flawlessly
    Loved it!!
    Hautingly Beautiful,
    Wonderfully weaved rhyme
    ~sigh~

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 26, 2007

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    I like this, especially the second stanza, it was lyrical. 2nd line, I'd personally prefer "darkened", but that's just my opinion. It's quite a haunting piece even though packed with description and imagery. I love it sis, well done with this. Love you


  • azure85 gold member
    May 26, 2007

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    This is an excellent sonnet, your form and rhyme is great. And what a story it tells, using the wordbank! Good luck in the contest!


  • PerVirtuous
    May 26, 2007
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    Wow. Very nice wonderful image and great storyline.... I'm the first one!!! Three bunnies.

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