I put some crayons in a box,
and then I heard a shout.
"Quit, pulling on my purple locks,
or I will knock you out."
I looked around, then up and down,
but no one did I see.
It's the thing that happened next,
that you just won't believe!
I held the box in my right hand,
then poured the crayons out.
I watched the orange one slowly stand,
while the others rolled about.
To the center of my table,
the purple slowly rolled.
She peeled off all her label,
then to the orange she strolled.
The brown and red stood by her side,
the green and black, they slept.
Then pink and blue, they waved good-bye,
back to the box they crept.
The yellow in all her glory,
crawled over to my hand.
Slowly she told the story,
about this crayon land.
"It's very crowded in that box,
it's why we scream and shout.
Have you just a brain of rocks,
why won't you leave us out."
She pleaded with all her might,
though her little voice was weak.
"They've suffocated Mrs. White,
it's freedom that we seek!"
I reached into a drawer
to see what I could find.
A larger place to store,
these little friends of mine.
I found a shiny tin
with lots of room inside,
Now happily within,
my tiny friends reside!
In a list
A contest entry
- for those who want to improve their poems and meet friends at the same time by star wars fanatic.
700 points, ended July 2, 2007, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bored out of my mind!!!! by Kappa Pyua.
525 points, ended September 1, 2007, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lies, Fascinations & Imaginary friends by Rebekah-Ann.
525 points, ended May 8, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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WONDERFUL IMAGINATION!!
I truly enjoyed this cute little write so much!
's This story would bring a smile to a young persons face as they lay down to hear their bedtime story. 's
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thank you Puppydog, I'm glad you like the tale of my very opinionated crayons
Blessings,
Sassy
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Darling!
Excellent rhyme and meter! Love the visual experience you bring to your audience!Very entertaining and creative! Kudos to you my friend! Standing ovation from me! Bravo indeed!
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thank you so much, I am so glad someone else loves this piece as much as I, it is one of my favorites. This was one of my fickle muse's colorful moments
Blessings,
sassy
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Very creative, can see the imagery of the fighting crayons. Quite laughable infact. Well done.
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thank you for your kind comments, as this is one of my favorites. My inspiration came from picking up crayons that had been broken and strewn about by my grandson
Blessings,
Sassy
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This is soooo creative! You are very talented. I really love this
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thank you
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Thank you for your fun poem it was a joy to read.
Please join us in our future contests we would love to read more from you...Sue and Jeff
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I LOVE THIS!!!
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thanks for the contest and the silver
Blessings,
Sassy
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that is so cute! i love it. great job, and very creative. you have a fabulous imaginatioon. this is a great poem for kids and adults alike.
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I loved it! It was so cute! I love all that sort of fiction crap! My friends call me crazy...but I think it's cute. It in a way reminds me of Shel Silverstein. I'm sure you know him. You should get this poem published for children!!
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cute
This is too cute, I really like this one very much, it makes me smile, Good luck in contest. -
Absolutely creative, unique, original and pleasant...c]such vivid imagery and narration, could actually see these lil crayons...well done...well deserving of a shiney
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thank you,
for your comments, glad you liked my little crayons
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This is so comical and very cute. I love the whole thing and have no suggestions.
Name, please?
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thanks for the silver, and the contest
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I love it, i have writen about a talking cow, a talking frog and a talking pencil, but this takes the cake. I thought that i was a nutter but in reading this i see that i'm not, or at least that i'm not the only one. so thankyou indeed for that little uplift.
P.S. have you ever wondered what paintbrushes get up to in the night, raunchie little buggers.
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wOnDeRfUl superb EXCELLENT
Thank you, I love it. I have a poem somewhat in the your same style and along the same lines (rhyme - rythm). It is THE DAY JESUS MET SANTA ,on Allpoetry. I think you will really enjoy it - billpoet
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creative
i loved it and chuckle the whole way through but insane you say i do not agree doing these exactly like everyone else seems insane to me cute write nice job please keep writing you have a wonderful gift
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This is truly excellent, really rreally good, let's start at the end, a great last verse, wraps up the poem well and keeps it self contained.
I find it difficult to take creative ideas and turn them into poetry, i always cop out and write about myself and my feelings! Full praise tot his piece, nicely written, good use of language, and good layout.
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Thank You
for your comments, glad you liked this humourous little piece. It is one of my favorites
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BRAVO
But, I gotta say this happened to me once.... (I'm just kiddin') VERY entertaining!! LOVE IT ~~~ ROCK ON ~ Good luck on the contest sis~ Go for GOLD well deserved!!!
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ha ha thanks for your entry good luck
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i have a poem that is along the same lines as this lol about an oil pastel shouting for escape i still ahvent done any art in awhile a good fun piece
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