Everyday
I try to laugh
but I don't know how.
I'm paralyzed
And I don't know why.
They all say
That it's okay
I see them smile
Talk awhile
But when I try
To hear their words
It doesn't work
Want to cry.
A single tear
Rolls down my cheek
I cannot speak
Don't know how to hear.
Can't hear the music
Playing
Can't hear what they
Are saying
Can't even hear
What I want to say -
'Run Away'
They look at me
And they feel sorry
They tell me
Not to worry
Speak through my eyes
As frustration
Starts to rise.
Held at bay
By an iron fence
I can only feel
The sound of Silence.
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Emotional out poor portrayed well my friendx
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very pretty and you can feel your emotions really well.
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Wow, this is so pretty!
I love the last stanza
Well, great job!
Amber -
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As a survivor of coma induced atrophy paralysis; had I been deaf, there are ways to communicate. Blink once for yes and twice for no. This could have been signed to me and would have been the first step on my road to recovery. Due to the hole in my Trachea; I could not speak. I could however, breath and blink.
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I can honestly say that I've never read anything along this theme, so I have nothing to compare it too. But I really like how you penned it. The style is very fitting and the words are smooth, with a great flow.
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its nice to know that we are not always alone on how we feel on the inside im glad these words flowed out of you to share with the world its a lovely piece
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WOW. This was so intense and so sad!!! I absolutely loved it, though! I don't know what to say. I'm speechless...typeless? Wordless? I don't know. Good luck in the contest.
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wow I like this it was intense and just wow I could picture it perfectly I know a lil deaf boy he is such a dear he cant hear the music I play but he can feel it because of this bass and it makes my heart swell when I see his happiness anyways this was beautiful
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Well, a unique piece to be certain, altough what comes to mind is that they rarely miss what they never had, i mean they may wonder about it but, having known many people that are and have had this very discussion, none of them feel overly distressed by it, mostly frustrated from the lack of ability to communicate, and even that is mild, having found ways, naturally, to manage it.
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Thank you for entering my contest.
It seemed a bit jumpy to me? But, it was nicly told; sweet and simple with good flow. Easy to be a part of.
Good job
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I think the ending is my favorite part. Th erhyming is kinda misplaced in some parts for me but it was a nice write!
Peace and Love
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crystaldust 30-05-07 17:29
I just dipped into AP a few minutes ago and caught up with your request, so came straight away to read your poem. It's beautiful and brilliant. Imagining - at least I hope you have imagined it - what it feels like to be deaf is tremendous and your words are spot on. So is the form. Free verse allows us to trickle out the emotion when we need to, so you have chosen well with this.
I simply can't believe you are only 14!!! Just keep on writing as well as this and you'll be at the top of everyone's choices.
Joy
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I enjoyed everything about your poetry!
Your a Finalist!!!
I wish you Good Luck in the Contest!
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The poem sructure allows the reader to move down the page. There are intense emotions here and you have trapped yourself here without sound it is difficult to express. This points to an emotional state and you have conveyed it well. Good Write!
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Wow, this is wonderful. I absolutely love it. It's very powerful. You have such a wonderful way with words.
Have a beautiful day,
FallenPoeticAngel
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Dammit
This is such a wonderful poem.. I wish I could write like you do.. I really like "Im separated from the world by an iron fence" and They look at me and feel sorry, they all tell me not to worry"
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