sing
from your
hidden source
become a born
lead
Author notes
CONTEST PLACINGS: no place
even though you might be born with talent, it still takes training to become a successful star.
A contest entry
- Lanturne-a-palooza by RedAquarius.
400 points, ended May 28, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Proper form. While I like your message, I just struggle with the ending, it seems abrupt to "become a born lead", my mind keeps adding -er onto that (obviously that would violate the syllable count). First 3 lines are great. Good luck and thanks for entering the contest!
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I like this one!!!!!!!!!! I think the forth line is fine! !!!!!! but, I know little about htis type write!!!! Anyway, good luck!!!!!!!!!!
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Interesting
Very unique. You might want to double check the fourth line, looks like you have five syllables. Good luck in the contest.
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i fixed it. if you want to read it again...
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WOOPS~ thanks for the check. i TOTALLY zoned out on that line. i even typed "and" instead of a "a"
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