Anything can break like glass,
if you make it fall.
I should know, can't you see
this heart, this plaster cast?
Anything can fall apart,
if you push enough.
I wonder if, is this why
I say that I don't care?
And any door can be unlocked,
with the proper key.
But, honey, don't you think I know:
that key won't work with me.
Author notes
I don't even remember quite WHEN I wrote this; only that it was months ago. To the people who tend to read my poems, sorry that I haven't been online... life's gotten more than crazy.
[Update: Jan. 31st '08] I don't particularly like this poem anymore, so feel free to... not comment... yeah.
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sad
You express your hurt very well in this poem. A broken heart takes so much time to heal. I like the reference to the plaster cast. Sometimes it seems easier to shut down emotionally and not care, but I don't think that is a good thing to do. One day you will find the right key and live happily ever after.
Aurora 2012
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Thank you very much! Heh, you always leave nice comments. ^__^
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Its very....er it can't think of the word i want but simply its awesome and i can eally relate to it how? its kinda personal so yeah but good poem none the less.
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Thank you! I think I get what you're trying to say. ^__^
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Nice
This is a very nicely penned poem and I did find one minor suggestion that may or may not help ya but just an idea:
Anything can break like glass,
if you make it fall.
I should know, can't you see
this heart, this plaster cast?
I read that 1st stanza and well I have a suggestion:
if you make it fall... How about if you allow it to fall
Just an idea and I donno if that'll help or not. any ways this is a very well penned lovly poem and I really just loved how you penned this so uniquely. any ways keep up the god work
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Thanks for the advice, and the compliments! ^__^
Hmm, I see what you mean with your suggestion. Though it looks better written, it sounds off to me when spoken. Thanks again, though!
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