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My Precious Victim


My friends

 

I make these words
for those who cry in the night
holding secret sins, so far within their soul

I have seen the anguish in this devastation, of men
forcing selfish power, upon another, in savage greed
taking and stealing, what is not given

Sometimes thru trickery and manipulation
often by force alone, and brutal aggression

preying upon the innocent youth

To the offenders goes the price of hell... forever
with the loss of peace, respect,
and the permanent stain of shame

To those who cry alone
who have been pushed, and preyed upon
I give my tears, and unending understanding

Please forgive, what you were never guilty of
become free of the deed, and let go forever
knowing, it is he, who bears this predatory sin

In heaven... my fair friend

there is nothing to be forgiven in you

forgive them, if you can

Your soul is clean
you have no sin

my precious victim

 

Survive... and live again



LeeL

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  • pulsating
    August 2
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    rape and abuse are wrong....it's probably not an easy thing to do to forgive



  • My.Sinful.Love.
    June 29

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    its amazing that you understand the things ive gone through without even knowing me. thank you for the comment on my writing

    • Endeavor gold member
      June 29
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      My.Sinfull.Love

      I don`t know you
      I am just a good gusser
      Women call it intuition mostly
      I read your opening verse on your page
      and the spelling of your name, and shot an arrow
      to this verse

      lol

      Be kind on your self

      The follow up to this is on a comment below, Rick
  • evelynxxoo
    June 20

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    i think you have a gift to see peoples pain know what they need and will be there for them when the time is write if there were more people like you in the world it would be a better place to live in


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 29
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      evelynxxoo


      If there were more people like me
      it would get real complicated, real fast

      I do appreate what you are saying, thank you

      Rick

  • paw-writer silver member
    June 2
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    Wow!

    This write touches me deeply. I have struggled with issues from child abuse for years, and still struggle to forgive the abusers for good. It is a tough thing to do and truly feel it in your heart. This is just beautiful! Very profound write here. Blessings, Patty


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 2
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      Patty

      I dread reading your opening words
      yet I have heard this often from many women

      The comments on this verse are almost a healing in them selves
      Something to be read over time perhaps


      Some men are born into folly from there youth
      They missed the tenderness that may have tought them to love
      I dread where I may have been, if not for a carring mother
      She taught me, women are worth loving and defending
      Some men are just beyound them selves

      If you can ever forgive him
      not for his innocence, but from his compulsion
      you may find some reliefe


      As a follow up
      you might consider reading this
      http://allpoetry.com/poem/2522954

      You need not applaud, Just read

      Rick

      • paw-writer silver member
        June 3

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        Rick, my struggle to forgive involves not only my father but also a very cruel stepmother. I have a couple of my life stories on my homepage if you are interested. My mother passed from breast cancer when I was just a baby and I was raised by a woman who was so terribly abusive in every way. This is my struggle, but your words are healing and inspirational. blessings, Patty

        • Endeavor gold member
          June 3
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          Patty


          I am sorry that life is not easer
          That is a lot to live with
          That is why God made us so strong

          I know the feeling well, Rick

  • LoveorLust
    May 27

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    omg

    this poem Had me in tears...I have been through this and It means alot to know that not everyone is the same...Idk...I mean I have been hurt my men my momma brought home...and my dad...I think you did a great job on your write...thanks for sharing that write...

    • Endeavor gold member
      June 2
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      LoveorLust


      Sorry I missed your comment
      Thank you for your kindness for this write

      For your trama,
      would you please read my comment to Patty above your own

      Thank you for reading me

      Rick

  • unpredictablepoet gold member
    May 22

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    HOneslty as someone who is suffering through this, I found your words very touching. I was moved to tears.. maybe one day I can forgive myself for his sin.


    • Endeavor gold member
      May 22
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      Painfull


      Rearly have I found the woman needing forgiving
      Usally it is a selfish man that needs forgiving

      If you have guilt, set it aside in truth
      If you can forgive him, do it through Prayer

      Thank you for reading my words
      Please read something happy by me for balance

      Try "Forever and a Day"

      Rick

  • mozarts funeral gold member
    May 3

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    very well written. I hope that you stick by your friend and that your friend is forever comforted that they can trust you. I'm off to read more.

  • Cannonsfire silver member
    April 21

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    This is so very loving and beautiful Rick, so well deserving of a gold one. I hear the pain in it and I trust that your friend knows of your words and was comforted by them. Love, C

    . Rewarded 4


  • Iridessa MoonFlower gold member
    April 21

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    I really liked this a lot! The world is filled with people that want to hurt one another. As I sat and read this I to thought about all that has been done to my friends, myself & other's I do not even know! Thank you for sharing this piece here on AP! Thank you for making me fell humble, I needed that tonight!
    In Love & Light... Blessed Be!
    ~~Irideesa MoonFlower~~

    . Rewarded 6


    • Iridessa MoonFlower gold member
      April 21
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      forgot!

      I wanted to also say that healing does take time, & sometime we never forget! ~~Iridessa~~
  • JWGoethe
    April 21

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    powerfully expresses the tragic feeling of the victim. confusion, guilt, all the twisted bitterness and wondering why, what did I do wrong to bring this perversion upon me. Bravo.

  • ScarletO
    February 9

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    This is a superb written poem with a wonderful needed message. Many people who have been abused do take the guilt of the shame. That is how the manipulation works for the true sinner of the dirty deed.


    • Endeavor gold member
      February 9
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      Hi Scarlet


      Many I have found, still harbor guilt

      I wanted to give another thought on this

      Thank you for your applause

      Rick

  • ravensgift gold member
    December 8, 2007

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    This is a powerful write. I have a couple on similar subject matter. I understand this kind of pain but we don't have to stay victims....Thank you for your words.


    • Endeavor gold member
      February 9
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      Ravensgift


      No we don`t have to stay victims

      Thank you for reading me

      Rick

  • raggyann
    December 7, 2007

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    this was just beautiful poem on
    forgivness
    your words made this poem come to life
    wonderful


    • Endeavor gold member
      February 9
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      Hi Raggyann


      Pleased you liked my words

      Yes... Forgivness

      Rick

  • SilverButterfly gold member
    December 7, 2007

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    Richard you have certainly opened a door to forginess and healing through your incredible words of encouragement. I applaud you!!!! You are a kind and gentle caring soul, and it is shown here in your write!!!

    GBY
    SilverButtery


    • Endeavor gold member
      February 9
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      Butterfly


      Thank you for your thoughts on my words

      Thank you for GBY and the three Smilies

      Rick

  • The mask of time
    November 28, 2007

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    Wow,"I make these words for those who cry in the night
    holding secret sins, so far within their soul" this is really great... It's very hard living with such a secret.


    • Endeavor gold member
      November 28, 2007
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      Mask


      It is very difficult and damaging
      This realy needs out, and many carry quilt from this

      I appreate you for reading me
      Thank you for the three bunnies

      Rick

  • urapns66
    November 23, 2007

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    amazing

    "Please forgive, what you were never guilty of
    become free of the deed, and let go forever
    knowing, it is he, who bears this predatory sin"

    i love these words your granting the reader something they cannot do themselves they need to hear from someone els that they're ok and to say that as a writer is very powerful to the reader

    • Endeavor gold member
      November 28, 2007
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      Hi 66


      I think it realy does help
      if someone elce says "your Ok, your innocent"

      Just laying the truth out, for them to read
      I thank you, Rick

  • The Godfather
    November 12, 2007

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    I really love this piece! It is so inspiring and something I can very much relate to...
    One of the best poems I've read on this sit and I mean that with all honesty!!!


    • Endeavor gold member
      November 12, 2007
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      Hi


      Thank you for reading this

      I appreate you saying what you did

      Thank you for the three smilies

      Rick

  • flyinghigh
    November 2, 2007

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    my precious victim

    I love how you are consider your victim to be precious.
    This makes me want to be victimnized by you???

    • Endeavor gold member
      November 2, 2007
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      Flying high


      Thank you for reading nthis

      I dread this is so prevelent

      Rick

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    A well deserved trophy for sure. As a survivor myself, I was captivated by this write and the compassion you have shown for victims of abuse!

    My favourite part was:
    "Please forgive, what you were never guilty of"
    Something that is very hard to do... but is a must if we are ever to get over the past!!

    Wonderful write!


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 31, 2007
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      Kiwi


      Thank you for quoting me

      I congradulate you for being a survior
      I appreate your currage to move on and live on

      Thank you for the three Bunnies

      Rick

  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 28, 2007
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    Great write congratulations on the gold in this contest


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 31, 2007
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      Lou


      Thank you for reading me

      I like the three smiles

      Rick

    • Endeavor gold member
      October 28, 2007
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      Hi


      I did not know I got a Gold till I read your message

      CooL

      Thank you for caring for my words

      Rick

  • Stardust-luvr
    October 28, 2007
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    My Dearest Rick a well earned and deserving Gold Congrats hun xxx

    • Endeavor gold member
      October 31, 2007
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      Stardust


      Thank you for saying well earned and deserving

      You are very kind

      Rick

  • Viyanna Rosemarie
    October 28, 2007

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    thank you very much for your entry into this contest for child abuse awareness. i am wishing you the best of luck in this contest as well as in all you future writings. viyanna rosemarie

    • Endeavor gold member
      October 28, 2007
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      Rosemarie


      Your contest was perfect for this write
      I have tried to offer a form of a cure in this
      Many have said the verse gave them relief from their anguish
      I dred that this exisist in our world
      Some waste their life and should never be born
      I leave this to God`s wrath

      Rick

  • Stardust-luvr
    October 27, 2007

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    My dearest Rick your words of truth and compassion speak such profound magnifiscence and I have years ago disowned my brother for the abuse he endured upon me and have grown into the person I am today who gives my all and hope for everyone else's joy and happiness. much love always Eilene xxxxxxxxxxxxx


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 27, 2007
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      Eilene


      Sorry for your tramma
      Has he ever talked of this, with you

      Just my thoughts, if he ever offers remorse, forgive him if you can
      You may find reliefe in this in time

      Thank you for caring for my words, hope they bless you

      Rick

      • Stardust-luvr
        October 27, 2007
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        My dear Rick I am always blessed by the beauty of your words as well as your wonderful spirit and soul. No he hasn't talked about it but then it was me he would beat up on and not my other 2 sisters at all. but in time who knows but until then I have moved on and wish him the best in his life just as I have in mine in the incredible friends I have xxxx

        • Endeavor gold member
          October 27, 2007
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          Eilene


          If you have worked this out in your mind, it matters not
          I dread that he did not face his own offences at some point

          I commend you for your stringht and currage
          You were wise to settle this in your mind

          Be Blessed

          Rick

          • Stardust-luvr
            October 27, 2007
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            I have always cherished you since we met on AP and I continue to be blessed by your friendship and your inspiring words and spirit!! much love always, my dear friend xxxx Eilene xxxx

  • CherryOnTop
    October 25, 2007

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    Being a victim you really have penned this horrendous act that so many of us have to live with every day.Thank you!


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 25, 2007
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      girlish


      Amazed that name was not taken already

      Sorry for your trama, draw a line and step over, if you can

      Hope this helped you

      Rick

  • Ithica silver member
    October 18, 2007

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    Thank-you so much. I did carry alot of guilt for a while which ultimately seemed that I kept drawing more of the same types of predatory men into my life. They didn't all leap out of the shadows yet their true colors remained hidden for a time. I finally learned, I had to forgive and let go of it all, or for my entire lifetime remain victimized. When you change your perspective from fear and hate to love and forgiveness you draw loving and forgiving people into your life. Others still need to hear this message. Thank-you for sharing this... Ithica


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 25, 2007
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      Ithica


      Sorry I missed your thoughtfull comment
      Sometimes we duplicate a hertfull situation cause we are familure, however painfull, I hope you have found your way out perminatly

      Thank you for reading me

      Rick

  • luckynsincere gold member
    October 13, 2007

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    As a victim myself, I was very moved by your words here. There is nothing more painful than the actual thoughts that the victim herself had done the wrong deeds. Like it was somehow deserved, or that there was a way that the victim could have done things differently to prevent such hatred. These are the results of being manipulated. This, my friend is a powerful piece, and will help to rinse the wounds of many. Carrying this burden is almost as detrimental as the actual abuse.

    Well done. Thank you for sharing your sweet soul with me. I pray that your friend knows their worth and that they will remember that the burden is not theirs to carry.

    Much love,

    Mel


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      Hi Ithica


      What you said to me is not uncommon
      I have herd this before
      I am please you found another way to live with this
      Thank you for carring for my message here
      I respect your currage

      Rick

    • Endeavor gold member
      October 13, 2007
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      Hi Mel

      I am so sorry abuse has been a part of your past
      Most victoms realy do carry guilt as if beauty alone was a sin, or thinking they should have resisted to their death.

      There is always force or manilapation as part of this, sometimes over time. I hope you are somewhat free of this trama and have balenced it all out in your mind to your favor.

      This was disterbing to write for my friend

      Rick

  • PerVirtuous gold member
    October 12, 2007
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    You speak truth. There is no stain from being a victim, only from staying one.


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 12, 2007

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      Hi Allen


      You are so correct in your words

      Thank you for reading me and for the three Smilies

      Rick

  • mypassion
    October 12, 2007

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    just reading again..

    Your words show hope and are very inspirational
    to us with a troubled past..

    xxoo

    brat

    • Endeavor gold member
      October 12, 2007
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      Brenda


      Love to give you hope
      There is always another way, than the past

      Your kind to read me again

      Rick
  • cokacolacowpok
    October 10, 2007

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    Friend, this is a great tribute to women who have been through an abusive relationship. Women are the beauties of this world and they deserved to be treated with great respect. Well penned.


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 12, 2007
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      Coka


      I so fully agree, women are the beauty in the world
      without you, I would be surrounded by only Barbarians

      Thank you for reading me

      Rick

  • BeautifulFlame gold member
    October 5, 2007

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    Rick ,
    Tears flowed as I read this . Your heart was very open to the feelings of the victims like me. I still go through hing but of a diffrent nature with my husband now . Its verbal and his way or the hell to pay .
    Like walking on eggshells careful not to set him off.
    At thistime i am thankful for AP and hearts like yours who see us ...


    I make these words
    for those who cry in the night
    holding secret sins, so far within their soul

    I have seen the anguish in this devastation, of men
    forcing selfish power, upon another, in savage greed
    taking and stealing, what is not given


    Powerful words and so true ..i am looking for the door now with 3 teens its hard to find but i will be that survivor soon!
    You are a treasure Rick dont stop being you!
    ~Lisa~


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 11, 2007
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      Lisa


      I write these words for women just like you
      By the time I finished reading your thoughts, my eyes were wet
      If you have teens, they will already understand
      Sometimes with thought, no man is better than, a crule man
      This is a lot to say, so counsel with an honest, close, friend or Pro.

      Thank you for caring for my words.
      My best wishes for speaking your truth, to You

      Rick

  • esroddo silver member
    October 2, 2007

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    This is a fantastic peace my friend, With such truthful words. A lot to time us women thing its our fault that we are hit, and because we deserve the beating because we provoked his anger. I have many of friends that are treated this way. And take the blame for there beating. And I had told them they are not to blame and should not endure this type of abuse. But fear and guilty don’t let them get away. You can’t help some one that don’t what help. This write would be nice for those abused women in the world. LISA


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 2, 2007
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      Hi Lisa


      In my mind, there are no words that can be said
      to justify striking any woman. They should have immunity

      My verse is slanted to phisical and sexual abuse.
      Self image, plays a role in allowing abuse beyond one mistake
      Most often, abusers were themselves abused, yet that is an excuse

      Thank you for reading me so carefully

      Rick

  • FaeRae
    September 14, 2007

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    I don't know what to say. . .

    Can I have your permission to show this to my boyfriend? I am sometimes cruel to him, I sometimes push him away; sometimes I can not bear his touch even though I breath him in my soul everyday. I do not know how to explain to him why I do these things. If I could show him this, perhaps he would understand and then I just may be able to find the words to explain myself - words that have eluded me and are painful to use. If I may have your permission? Thank you for reiterating that we are blameless . . . I can't begin to descibe the horror that follows our nightmares where we are to blame.

    Bless You, Dear Poet.

    ***Rae***


    • Endeavor gold member
      September 14, 2007
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      Rae


      My friend

      Many read this for a healing, my words are public

      I would be honered if you feel it would help his understanding

      Thank you for reading my thoughts

      Rick

  • AllHopeIsEclipsed555
    September 10, 2007
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    LOVE IT!!!!

  • AllHopeIsEclipsed555
    September 10, 2007
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    i would appreciate a comment on one of my poems to see what an expert thinks, seriously this is amazing!!!!!!! this poem is so good i cant put it in words

  • nothinghere silver member
    September 8, 2007

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    I have been there in between the words of this piece, in sentences I thought my name should never been in. I have survived the worst and come out the other side with many lessons tucked away in my back pocket. It is wonderful on the flip side to see a man write something to poignant about a topic not many men will go near.... I stand in applause for that alone. Brilliant piece, which I would like to bookmark with your blessing

    Karen


  • stavykm gold member
    September 7, 2007

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    Well Done

    So much depth and understanding of those that are the perpetrator and those that are the victim! I feel sad when I read this poem for the shame I myself feel, which your poem said forgive yourself which I am trying to do! I know the ones that have hurt me in my innocents I must forgive to experience more freedom within my own self. They are at the hand of God now not me. I have to work through it with God and professional help. The title is perfect My Precious Victim is so sad and a perfect title as you reach out to those that suffer. Then the first line my friends I just compliments the title. Then the last line Survive then live again, so much truth and very powerful. This write as a whole is very complete in the essence of reaching out as well as the poem as a whole. Thank you for sharing your gift!! stavykm


  • blondone silver member
    September 6, 2007

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    Very powerful write such strongs real life emotions love the flow and the tones make this a great read tugs at the heart strings for no one should ever be abused in any way shape or form...


    • Endeavor gold member
      September 7, 2007
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      Thank you my friend for reading this

      The emotions are what I have been told by women

      I pray this plage will end

      Rick

  • Grieving-Willow
    September 6, 2007

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    Please forgive, what you were never guilty of

    Such a POWERFUL sentence there! This entire poem had me in the verge of tears, because I have been a victim to abuse myself. I will never understand how a human being can inflict such physical pain on another. If you don't mind sir, I shall mark this ... I pray your friend finds peace

    • Endeavor gold member
      September 7, 2007
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      Sara Dawn


      I am proud of your currage to confess this here
      This is hard to understand, yet we are all born selfish.
      We are moderated and calmed by rules, or faith, or compassion.
      This is selfish taking at it`s worst, with no care for the other
      Read all here, and the comments, to aid your cure from guilt

      Love, Rick

  • Justinez
    September 4, 2007

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    Wow so emotional!

    To those who cry alone
    who have been pushed, and preyed upon
    I give my tears, and unending understanding
    I think this part sums up the whole write. You seem a very warm and caring soul and portraying forgiveness is the ultimate!

    . Rewarded 4


    • Endeavor gold member
      September 4, 2007
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      Justinez


      Thank you for seeing so far into my words

      Your summary and the last few words, are the essance

      I thank you for reading me. Try somthing lite of mine

      Rick