Your eyes pierce my flesh
your hate for me unwanted
but that is my regret.
Chorus:
I tryed to understand you
but you pushed me away.
Now I'm trying to save you,
dont let me leave you here in time
People here might hate and haze you
but I'll be here to love you.
We won't stay here with all of them.
Let's get away from all of this.
I want to walk with you through the bad times
I want to be with you through the good,
but I cant unless you trust me and let me in
Chorus/
I don't want to leave it this way.
Please let me talk to you.
Can't you see I'm always here for you?
Don't think because of who I am
I'll be unfaithful to you.
I would leave you here if my love wasnt true.
the clock is running out.
We're running out of time.
Please come with me.
I dont want to leave you here in time.
A contest entry
- Calling all Lyrical Poets by Maddogk.
600 points, ended June 26, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LJKnKNC by Makinbettachoices.
650 points, ended December 21, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like how open and honest you were with this, its very rare these days that you find a poem or song where a writer pours their heart out. And I can relate to this in a past relationship too, though not exactly but somewhat. This was a job well done, my only suggestion is that you change all the "i" to capitals just to help the presentation of the song. but otherwise its great!
x from the ashes x -
wow im sixteen and in oklahoma
i also only have seven poems lol i just started writing and this is a really gud song by the sound of it i play guitar and im trying to sing so this is a vary good start...newayz great write
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I found this to have a nice flow and rythmn.
Good luck and well done..
Jeffro
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