May I --?please?--
Smack you in the
face!
^_^<--For you
ANNOY
ME! (Insert Obcenities Here)
I'd rather die....
X_X [DEAD!]
Art thou {Thou is a really strange word meaning "you}
not human? //Free Thinkers Are Dangerous!\\
So lose yourself in the (QUIET!)
For a fac e full of pizza *No onions....*
Now for a piece trash like a pair of sandals --Dropped To The Trash!--
This is all in a system going down
~More or less that way-->~
So before the announcement {[Four Score and Seven Years ago, or just last week when the bombs fell, where the Hell were you?]}
And thus another heart warming ^Bloddy tears rain on the WhiteHouse^ end to my little escapade....
Do you know what candy is made out of? :Something about Kodak Film:
(System End) (System Down)
Author notes
option 2
For the "Options options options" contest, Option 1
for the anything contest - option 1
A contest entry
- Options options options by Heartbeatsxfading.
450 points, ended June 2, 2007, 18 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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I liked the way this write was abstract and you explained your meaning in the brackets... It was kind of different. I don't know it just had something interesting about it and something philosophical throughout, yet slightly humourous and light hearted, I don't know which one takes priority. ♥
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lol
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And thus another heart warming ^Bloddy tears rain on the WhiteHouse^ end to my little escapade....
that's so tiring -
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what do you mean tiring?
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well, after you've said that for 130 weeks
you wonder if it will ever change
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Wow, this was kinda different, I like it a lot though...
""Art thou {Thou is a really strange word meaning "you}
not human? //Free Thinkers Are Dangerous!\\
So lose yourself in the (QUIET!)
For a fac e full of pizza *No onions....*
Now for a piece trash like a pair of sandals --Dropped To The Trash!--
This is all in a system going down
~More or less that way-->~""
That part inparticular blew me away. Great job hun and good luck!
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this is a cool poem and I liked the twist of humor
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wow
this was really cool, totally random but not in a bad scattery god this is weird crap way, in a really good way.. um thats probably not helpful at ALL but im sorry. yeah its hard to fit it into a genre, it begins quite fun and then sorta gets deeper.. though im probably not right at all.. (?) but yeah
well thanks for the read its a really great poem
p-r x -
Awesomeness. Reminds me of a friend...
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lol, ok this was out there but cool i mean you did a great job on this poem it was amazing, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Interesting to say the least. You certainly have quite the imagination and creative flair lol. I think though, near the end, you meant 'bloody'? Very interesting write. Very nice.
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Wow. This really reminds me of one of my best guy friends, he's really like a brother to me. This just... radiates his personality. Good work.
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Kool
We often forget how little even less of sentences are really connected durring a day week even life time, after all we can do is to smile
8-)
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Wow... This is probably the most original poem I have read in quite a while. It gives a feeling of random thoughts and words put together, but it makes perfect sense. Nice write.
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This reminds me of thoughts one might have in that strange state between wakefulness and sleep. It's quite unusual, but I rather enjoyed it.
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I love the way you seemingly string words together and they all suction together brillantly....
{[Four Score and Seven Years ago, or just last week when the bombs fell, where the Hell were you?]}
Best line I've read in a while!
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Abstract to the point of delighting me! lol, love the references to the socio political stand offs throughout time and the humor interspersed makes it a great chuckle with plenty to ponder over as well. Enjoyable read. Love, C
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I really liked:
"just last week when the bombs fell, where the Hell were you?]"
Great write.
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