Sarah was my best friend ever
She promised me it would be forever
So I’m lying here in this toxic nightmare
Waiting for her to come back
And fix my dreams that she shattered
I watched her drift away from me
Like an angel caught in an undertow from hell
Consumed by her own pain
Lost inside a numb haze
Of prescription pills and cocaine
She told me she felt hollow
And tried too search for her lost self
By carving lines of blame
Into the canvas of her inner legs
A long time ago we played
With barbies in the sandbox
Now I play alone,
A game called searching through the hurt
For my best friend Sarah.
A contest entry
- 203;203;203;203;203;203;​​;​;&#& by WhatLiesBeneath.
690 points, ended July 15, 2007, 52 entries
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wow reading this again and i love this part
So I’m lying here in this toxic nightmare
Waiting for her to come back
And fix my dreams that she shattered
I watched her drift away from me
Like an angel caught in an undertow from hell
best poem ive read in a while -
pretty awesome! this is going to my bookmark list 4 sho!!!
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I really this one. It has the potential to be a song. It just needs a bit more added. Keep the ink flowing, my friend and good luck.
~Donna~
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good
I really liked this... thank you for entering my contest... -
"Of prescription pills and cocaine
She told me she felt hollow"
Hmm, my name isn't Sarah.
Dark content, horrible story (one I can relate to) but not eactly dark poetry.
I'm sorry your friend found drugs, they're never the right answer but most the time they seem to be.
Darn posers.
Thanks for the entry
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It was pain, but a very good write. It flowed well and you had set it out so it was easy to read. It flowed smoothly and the words fitted perfect. Thanks for entering.
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Oh this is sad,great write!
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