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Why Not?

When it rains and potholes turn to puddles
we walk around them though we might often wonder why
I once decided to be different asking myself why not
So I jumped from plash to plash, and my socks got wet.

I looked up in to the star filled night
and wondered why the sky sparkled like glitter
then tried to imagine only an empty void, why not
I tried to fill my thoughts of nothing at all, I couldn't.

When I prayed for faith and gave my blessings to God
I asked myself why I pray to someone I can't even see
surely I can think of a power I can see, I mean why not
so I took my soul to the bank where they could keep it safe.

The teller told me they couldn't deposit what they can't count
why should I keep what I can't give my higher power, the bank.
I'll sell my soul to the devil for money they can count, why not
my statements came each month and soon I was rich.

My friends came and ask me to repent to God.
I said,  "why he never gave me interest like this."
I died last night and at heavens gate I wrote a check, why not
a voice said, "but you can't enter heaven you have no soul"

"Why I have money in the bank?"
the voice answered,"your socks are wet, you think of nothing,

you sold your soul to the devil, we don't take checks

and you can't buy your way into heaven 
sorry , that's why not."




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Some men see things as they are and say why - I dream things that never were and say why not.
-George Bernard Shaw

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  • myrataal silver member
    September 6, 2008

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    A write that brought a smile to my lips ...

    you are correct. Put your soul in the Bank of Love.

    Thank you for reading my work. I truly appreciate it.

    Myra


  • Hebz
    August 4, 2008
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    Cool, well-written & expressed!

    Thnx for entering & Best of Luck

    GloriousGift
    Heba


  • DancingRed
    September 20, 2007
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    A delightfully written piece; your images are most thought-provoking and realistic.

    Perhaps in some places it could have been a little more poetic - such as the two bank stanzas.

    The first stanza in my favourite - the descriptions come alive very nicely.

    I think shorter line lengths would work great.

    Thanks for entering.

    DancingRed.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    August 31, 2007

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    Bravo....Wonderfully written!

    This to me was awesome! Two options, and in your poem you took one that ended up with nothing...How wonderfully you wrote it dear brother..A "chain rattler" for those who think the easy way is the right way...that easy way is made plain a simply wrong in your write...The message very clear....Wonderful life saving words!Good lesson on the right and wrong way of choices... I must have been away to miss this..Sorry..But Bravo at the same time! You blessed my soul by this write!


  • adios muchachos gold member
    July 29, 2007
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    Hi Dave

    "Mom, Dave's hoggin up all the muses again!"

    XLNT! I can see why this is one of your favorites.


    • Roaddog Wolf
      July 29, 2007
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      "I'm tellin ",... LMAO

      Your quite the character John, you seem to always brighten up the ole humor and good natured side of things, would be nice to find alot more folks with a similar demeanor around
      Thanks my friend.

  • Raven Judge
    July 26, 2007

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    Delightful story of metaphysics that may be metaphorical for our lack of concrete answers to difficult questions. This was a joy to read.

    Thank you for your entry.

    ~Das


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 20, 2007

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    Loved this write and the quote provided. I like the metaphors within, especially at the start using rain to describe what you are trying to portray.


  • earthstar
    July 12, 2007

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    "Why I have money in the bank?"
    the voice answered,"your socks are wet, you think of nothing,

    you sold your soul to the devil, we don't take checks

    and you can't buy your way into heaven
    sorry , that's why not."

    i laugh at this line there a sense of humor that jumped out at me.
    I like your point you can not buy your way to heaven there some that think money can take away sins. I think your title fits this write so very well. When your sin it looks so good. Till there a payday. This is a great example of it. Very good work.


  • Jai Guru Deva
    June 15, 2007
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    kind of random at first, but then it grows into a really good poem. good job


  • intanglio2ring
    June 13, 2007

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    A Puddle to Heaven's Gate!

    A subtle message of how important our souls are. You've turned some very good phrases here.
    Thanks for a wonderful entry & Good Luck in my contest!
    Tang


  • NickelleteXninja
    June 4, 2007

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    I liked it..

    {alot}

    when you started it was rocky and it seemed as if it was going nowhere, normally i'd leave a blunt comment and move on, but I kept reading it and I saw where you were going with it

    Its a wonderful, spiritual, inspiring poem

    not only does it tell me to follow my own path but it gives me inspiration in all aspects of life

    thanks for entering and good luck


    • Roaddog Wolf
      June 4, 2007
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      thank you

      your kind and informative comments are appreciated thank you


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 3, 2007

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    very unique and creative piece you have penned well here and such wisdom told...and yet the simple things in life brings the pleasure...I love jumping in puddles, make mud pies, beautiful! oh and congrats on the shiney things up there!


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    May 26, 2007

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    I had problems commenting earlier....I am back for a third time..

    Tyhis is absolutely the greaztest tribute..yes....and may I always be one to jump in puddles, stepon plastic patches of ice, and hange aroudn ont he fringe of things.....that is living...that is real living.

    • Roaddog Wolf
      May 26, 2007
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      Hi shewolfnative

      Thank you for your kind words and for allowing my entry in your contest. I am humbled by your decision to award my poem a Gold trophy I appreciate it very much. I also thank all the others who entered their work they are all winners too. Thanks again I am honored.
      Best reagards love and peace
      David
      (roaddog wolf)


  • Cannonsfire
    May 26, 2007

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    I think PK is correct, it is a unique look at an old tale but told so vividly, we all hope the devil pays the price in life, I am sure PK would have enjoyed your take on the Shaw quote, it is a delightful and most thoughtful read. Love, C


  • Peteskid gold member
    May 26, 2007

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    now this is something unique

    the devil pays but late in the game one wishes it were different... a classic tale retold with imagery from this minute... so creative, and so very well done... Shaw would have seen it this way too i think... PK

    • Roaddog Wolf
      May 26, 2007
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      Thank you PK

      I appreciate your kind words. Having an accomplished writer as yourself say it is unique and well done is encouraging to say the least. Thanks again.
      Best Regards
      David


  • ButterflyforChrist
    May 25, 2007

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    This is soooo awesome! I LOVE this! such a great message this holds. Wonderful job my friend! THis is amazing, but then again, you're poems always are! Great job!

    ~Duckie~

    • Roaddog Wolf
      May 25, 2007
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      lol thank you duckie

      your too kind but thank you for your sweet critique. I think you might like the other new one too "childhood recollection"
      thanks sweetie.

      • ButterflyforChrist
        May 25, 2007
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        Hehe, you're always welcome! =)
        And I like the nick-name too! It's cute. Never been called Duckie before, hehehe.
        I'll check it out!

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