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i remember

the world has its expectations
but I'm not one of them
the scars say it all
the bags on my eyes
the callouses on my hands
they say it all
they have there story
and there story is mine


Ive seen things
and Ive heard things
that maybe i shouldn't have


i remember the man
who violated me
who used me for his pleasure
his wrinkles
his suit
his glasses
his bolo

 

i remember
the orphanage
and its cold dark walls
and how it made you feel alone


i remember
being beaten
because i didn't want to get a shot


i remember
going crazy


i remember
drinking
to try to forget my past
to try to feel normal again
to try to fit in
to try to be myself
like i use to be


i remember
the cutting
because i was confused
because i was angry
because i felt i was wrong
because i felt it was my fault
i remember

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yea i guess thats my story. i hope you like it.

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  • thelovesongwriter
    June 4, 2007

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    wow..full of emotion...great job.but this part had me confused...
    i remember
    the orphanage
    and its cold dark walls
    and how it made you feel alone

    who is "you"? you're tlking about your life story but you bring in a you..
    anyways, nice job. i liked it.


  • ShelbieSchizo
    May 30, 2007

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    I am so sorry that all this has happened to you, I wish you could've had my life instead, i thought mine was bad, but now it seems perfect. Again, I am so very sorry.I wish there was something i could do, but i know there isn't. Im so sorry.


  • Atrophya
    May 26, 2007

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    OH HONEY!! IM GONNA FUCKING SHOOT THAT ASSHOLE THAT DID THAT TO YOU!! I'M PISSED NOW! I hope you're feeling better and I'm glad that you're slowly healing, if you ever need a faithful friend, I'm here for you!! =]


  • Twins 4 me
    May 25, 2007

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    This is a very sad write. I am so sorry you had to experience these things. Good luck in the contest!


  • passim silver member
    May 25, 2007

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    This is a very sad story, but I enjoyed the way it is written. It just needs a spell check: title needs an 'm'. 1st stanza should be 'their'story in both cases. 3rd stanza should read 'suit' not suite. I don't know what a bolo is so I won't question that one. I hope that you take my comments kindly because this poem is just too good to be spoiled by spelling mistakes.
    Well done. Keep up the writing and good luck in the contest.

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