Colors bleeding
from your eyes
a rainbow
in each drop,
and once the flood
begins to flow
theres no way
it can stop.
A contest entry
- ~ 10 Lines Or Less ~ by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended July 18, 2007, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poetic Masters by Climax.
1600 points, ended August 31, 2008, 35 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Rain Of Pain.
Tears fall like the rain...
But it's not always based on pain.
This poem is short but more then enough...
It can relate to many things including love.
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rainbow tears, now there is great imagery! I like how it is nice and simple, with a good rhythm in the words. Nice job, and good luck in the contest!
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in the prism of a tear, many colors are reflecting from the darkness of one's soul, perhaps there is hope in that, to know that even a tear can be lovely in its natural form, is comforting to those who weep.
thanks for your comments. ~~Artis
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Simple and sweet, as the subtle rhyme adds a nice acostic effect to this, creating a soothing gentle effect. Nice job with this one.
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True,
Love the imagery here you've created, well worded indeed. Wishing you all the best within the contest, peace, -Timothy aka poeticweaver~ -
Aawww so very sad. I have been left feeling like this by the way people have treated me and by no means is it nice. I hope you are alright and this isn't based on the way you personally feel at the moment or have done, if so you can always talk to me. Beautiful flow though.
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sensational imagery....
There's an array of emotion in Rainbow Tears. Bravo on a fine piece!
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My Favorite: Keep Writing
I just keep loving your work the more and more I read! Rainbow Tears is my favorite...straight to the point and beautiful imagery. All I can see is: blue tears for sorrow, red tears for rage, gold tears for delight, green tears for those moments of self hate and envy just so many things in this one short poem! I rate this #1! So far!
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wow
greatttttt jobb! -
Perfect
Everything about it is perfect...I love the use of colors in poetry and this is the perfect example...I like the rhyme in it...This is one of those poems that I'm going to go back and reread until it's memorized, and think of it throughout the rest of my life.
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Very touching and tender. Very nice job for a short write. Loved the first half, rainbows in teardrops, nice visual. Good job.
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