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Killing Machine

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Killing Machine

The beauty of an instrument of death
Behold my kingdom, it is I who reigns
A blast of hot air emits from my breath
Arabian blood in my silver veins

With each cut of the blade my belly grows
A deafening rage emits from my gut
Stripping my victims of green silken clothes
Banishing beauty with each sultry cut

Spewing the essence of flowering things
Gathering souls with such perfect control
I relish the joy that such killing brings
So stand in my way and I’ll take your soul

A simple kill, my victims are slower
I’m king of the field, I’m the lawnmower

 

 

 

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Sonnet:

Sonnets are formal poems and consist of 14 lines (3 quatrains and a couplet) , traditionally written in iambic pentameter - that is, in lines ten syllables long, with accents falling on every second syllable.
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • toomysterious
    November 6
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    Nice little treat of an ending. Great humor.


  • C.I.M.A Punk
    July 12
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    The couplet made me laugh.
    The word choice and rhyme are great.

    Great job!


  • echo-ink
    July 15, 2008
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    WOW, Awesome, Fantastic, Amazing.

    have three bunnies, one to carry each compliment to your bunnie total. love, poeticlove.


  • DAMSELx
    February 4, 2008

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    Ooo, I liked this one..
    It DEFINITELY got me at the end...
    Nice wording, great rhyme and hell of a twist!

    Thank you, good luck!!


  • Kathryn Bowden
    February 3, 2008
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    Wonderful! I enjoyed every line!


  • crivanea silver member
    October 11, 2007

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    ohhhh i get it!!!..u mean it litterally..and the green clothes are the grass...this is a satire/humor?..ok..i get it..lol..i was reading too much into it before,...nice job..

  • crivanea silver member
    October 11, 2007
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    a sonnet..ohh...i was right..ok..nice sonnet..nice rhymes..i'm not sure if i'm getting the last two lines right though..is he litterally the lawnmower? i'm gonna assume u mean that metaphorically..that he is the mower of death?..but king of the field sounds a bit strange...unless u mean field as in graveyard?..kinda remind me of the chainsaw..w/t he title as it is...nice job


  • CJDenton
    October 11, 2007

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    Astonishing...

    WOW! I really love this, its awesome, the rhyme is really good and its got some great adjectives in it. Great job, this one deserves to do well!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 10, 2007
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    Cool

    Didn't expect a lawnmower! Absolute classic! Good luck in the contest!


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    October 8, 2007

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    YAY!!!!!!!!!

    THIS IS ASTOUNDING!!!!!
    I love it,
    i love poems like these, that force the reader to delve inside the depraved mind of a killer, to think, feel and kill like them.
    This is AWESOME and you captured the madness and lust for murder qutie well!


  • shirk
    June 1, 2007

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    Haha. I like this...I totally didn't think you were talking about a lawnmower, and for that, and all of your other literary genius, welcome to the finalist list.


  • Swan song gold member
    May 25, 2007

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    Thius is a nice soennt and you depicted the lawn mower as an unmerciaful god reigning vengence down on his kingdom That is excellent, Good Job


  • PerVirtuous
    May 25, 2007

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    You are always on the cutting edge with your poetry. Everybody gives you three bunnies? Heh heh heh. Or Else!

    I wish I could stay longer... only on for a minute... back later. Three bunnies.


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 25, 2007

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    The other contestants might
    as well hang it up...You are
    superb, a mistress of poetry,
    and when I came to the last
    line....I smiled wide....You
    will always leave me shaking
    my head, and feeling like I
    just received the best gift.
    Love, Lane

    PS: Notice the...BUNNIES


  • Desire gold member
    May 25, 2007

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    Holy Moly!!

    You know who I am coming to for Sonnet looky
    which I am working on~ Geeeeeeeeeesh!
    What a piece You have penned and the images~
    definitely for me turns the stomach
    but that shows how much Power was packed
    Ending Brilliant~~~~
    Beautifully crafted!!
    Make it look tooooooooooooo easy!
    Loved it

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 25, 2007

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    Sis, I like this very much, it's chilling in it's verbiage and imageries! The twist at the end is fabulous, no one would know till then that you speak of a lawnmower The metaphors and descriptions are powerful indeed. This is a brilliant sonnet, one of the best I've seen of late from you. So glad I saw it Love you always. Laura

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