Hallow white pathways,
consent the final advance.
Breaking the mist to become,
Invulnerable,
to past stumbles in their lives.
Make way for the to-be saints.
Author notes
By Teddibly Abnormal.
Option: 2
A contest entry
- Quickie Form Contest - Pic Inspired by ChildeOfChaos.
650 points, ended June 7, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Congratulations on the trophy.
A good poem with strong imagery, it doesn't really work as a sedoka because the two Katauta are joined by the wording instead of being two seperate images.
Andrew -
Beautiful, congratulations on the silver.
whisper
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it's beautiful
I really think that you have a great grasp with the
english language
thus you are able to use it so effectively
great sense of imagery
I can easily tell that you spend time thinking about
your pieces and weave them accordingly -
Nicely penned sedoka. I love your interpretation of the picture. Your last line is beautiful, nice ending. Thanks for entering.
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