I first met you when I was nine
We sat next to each other and thought we both had kooties
Oh how those days went by oh so fast
Later on in that school year we chit chatted
I learned a little more about you
You learned a little something about me
From that very day on
I knew that I had to
Be with you
I remember how we first held hands
I was more mature than the other boys
And we were often picked on for it
Your name was Chelsie
A heaven sent name
One I would grow up to remember
We always played together that first year
I got to know you and like you
You liked me also and we were friends
You always cheered me on the sidelines
As I was the kick butt show off goalie
When I played soccer with the boys
I joined you on the sidelines every once in a while
To go play some tetherball with you
As we were both so good at
Through elementary and middle school years
We started to develop a love
That was practically unquenchable
Through out our high school years
I always walked you home and spent
All my free time hanging out with you
My fondest memory came the day we graduated
I pulled you aside by your parents and mine
And dropped down to that one knee
I mouthed the words I Love You Chelsie
I want to be with you forever
Will you Marry me?
The look on your face
Was the most priceless
Expression I had ever seen
Through teary eyes you said
YES! Oh YES Paul
I will marry you!
A few months and barely a couple
Days before your birthday
We departed each other
I told you I Love You and
Drove myself home that night
Just down the road from you
That morning they found you
More pale than a snowy blizzard
You were dead on your soft squeaky bed
I wept that day and wept some more
I could not believe that I lost you
I couldn't come to grips with this reality
We had everything planned out
We would get married at your home
In that very beautiful garden you built
I envisioned you wearing the most beautiful
White Wedding Dress that anyone has ever seen
You smiling with those pearly white teeth
Your funeral was a rough experience for me
Your parents inadvertently blamed me for your death
Saying I caused you to never be with your parents
To this very day
I remember that one faithful night
We spent together
I remember laying down with you
Hand in hand planning our future together
As husband and wife
I will always remember and love you
Cherish those priceless sacred memories
We both made together
This poem is to you Chelsie
You were my very first crush
My very first lover girl
I will always and forever
Hold onto you in my heart
For no one will ever replace you
Author notes
R.I.P. Chelsie August 18th,1984 to August 16th,2002 May you forever rest in peace and I chose option #1 about my 1st love Chelsie is my Angel
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Wow, this was amazing.
So full of depth and emotion
that just tugs at the heartstrings.
This was so deeply heartfelt
and you have described it so beautifully
the lovely memories...
keep up the brilliant works of art
you pen here
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Awe, this is so very heartbreaking. It hurts me in a way to. I know how it feels to have someone you love taken away from you for a long tim until it's your time to go too. It's not your fault that she died it was her time god needed her and he felt like she did her job her purpose in life was to make someone happy and have someone love her. That was you. You were her miracle and her life and you still are today. She will never forget you or the things you said she will cherish them forever and ever. I know this feeling I can relate this is truly sad yet so beautiful and it was very brave of you to express yourself and share this with us . I know it must of been really hard for you. And it will hurt you every once in awhile but in the end you will be okay because I bet she wants you to be happy.
Plus she waiting for you and making sure your okay but in heaven this is a very touching piece. I am sorry for your lose, your love, your wife the love of your life.
She so fragile yet so beautiful
no words can truly describe her beauty or love that
She shared or had for you :]]
it's like magic
A magician never relives their secret
great write keep up the good work my friend and hope she resting in piece :]]
Love always your friend
Maria
Many blessing and love
R.IP for eternity Chelsie
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wow
wat a great write about u 2 and it wasn't ur fault she died her parents couldn't really help her out in the end. i can feel your pain in this write heart broken crying most of the time u talk about her. i know u will always love her and she with u. one day u 2 will be together again and be happy it was great to know a bit about her when she was still alive may her soul r.i.p for eternity
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Awwwwwwwwww
Awwwwwwwwww
This is the most touching thing I have read in a very long time. I'm so sorry for your loss my dear sweet Ap Hubby. 
She sounds like she was a wonderful woman. I guess the Lord above had much bigger plans for her beautiful soul. 
Well done on writing this piece and thank you for sharing it with me.
Love Always
Your Ap Wifey
Countrybabe
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I think this could have been written better however this was a very heartfelt poem. This made me cry. I'm so sorry you had to go through this. I couldn't imagine my fiance dying.
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This is an amazingly written piece, I cannot possibly imagine what you went through...
Heart wrenching...
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No, no, no, no!! No one should have to go through that. That's... urgh. The poem is amazing, but I guess that it is absolutely no help at all! Moving.
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This made me cry!!! I could never imagine going through that, let alone being strong enought to write about it. When I first started reading it, I became involved instantly (I'm a total romantic) and was expecting a "happily ever after" ending, and was torn when it didn't end that way. This was beautiful, however, thank you so much for sharing.
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Heartbreaking...
you fiddled with our feelings, and then tore them to shreds. Very sad. Like I've sad before, bad luck never leaves you
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Very endearing, she'd be proud. It's tragic, smiple, and yet memorable.
I'm sorry for your loss, but in a way, I dont think you ever lost at all.
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thats a really beautiful and innocent dedication...
embodied with true love and devotion... -
aww
this is very sweet and heartbreaking to know she was taken from you, a very heartpulling piece full of memories and still vibrant with love, good job
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this is amazing.
so much emotion and feelings were put into this,
and it shows like the sun on a cloudless day.
this is absolutely beautiful in so many ways.
thank you for sharing this with everyone.
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I am so sorry for your lost - but you did have the most beautiful 9 years together with her...
Spend your time wisely when you are still here, but you know that she is waiting for you in heaven to be always forever.
Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem
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A wonderful although heart-wrenching story. Your emotions and memories just shine on through. While the ending was sad, you will always have your earlier memories; and while this may have been your first love, may you have other loves to help you on your path. Good luck in the contest.
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It's a grogeously sad write, but another glowing tribute to chelsie. Although some will see this as a story of how 2 people can be perfect for each other but never be together, Brie has spent alot of time convincing me that death isn't an end.
So i believe you'll be together again forever when the time comes.
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Superb plus
A very fine write and tribute. You have expressed yourself quite well, indeed. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
beautifule
saddened for your your loss, happy for your memories,and lost for words.....
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omg paul this is so so sad my eyes are all teary now, this is so passionate and amazing, I lovethe poem so so much, and it just proves happily ever after never really exists anymore.. hope your ok huni!
Brie
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Painful Read,
But how when honesty comes to light, there's not always a fairytale at the end of the story... I can feel pain within, such sorrow just by reading these words you wrote. I'm so sorry you had to endure this loss. Know you would of been the best husband bro, but at-least she had a chance to know what true love is, because when you both grew up together, you both shared your dreams and love with one another always. Well worthy silver, nice expressed piece, and much love to you brother.. Peace...
-Tim
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this brings a tear to the eyes.
just reading it i see you and her together.
as kids to teens.
you had lved.
you asked to marry
but some thing horrible went wrong.
but as you should always knw she is always there with you.
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Heartbreaking story so touchingly told!
Great stuff
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I loved and end unexpected
I loved the love story which very few might experience. While reading I imagined that we will hear of a happy ending but within me I was saying, could such a love story last? too good to be true, and here was the twist and the dagger in the heart one gets in the last lines. Such love stories are too good to last unfortunately. I am sorry my friend for you loss.
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AWW this is so sad
Ive tears in me eyes
to have loved and lost as young as you
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This is simply beautiful. Your love for her is so moving & insperational. I'm sure she is smiling, because this poem is written for her. I am deeply sorry for your loss.
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Ohh my.. so lovely and so heartbreaking. all my thoughts are for yo
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its very buttfull and shes lucky to be your first love
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This is a deep, emotive and heartfelt piece. A sort of, letting go, but keeping hold...You will always Love your first true love. This is something else. I'm totally blown away by the depth and honesty and rawness in this piece. It's rare to find a piece with such reflection in it.
Bravo Tiger....wonderfully done.
'D'
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Ow honey I'm so sorry. This piece is so touching and heart-wrenching at the same time. I see though the beautiful memories you had with her and they seem to far out way the sad and I know they will be the light within you for many a time to come. I'm sorry for your loss, there is no pain like losing someone you love so much, suddenly. You have shown alot of courage by penning this masterpiece.
Thankyou for sharing this with me
Lil
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Such a hard blow to loose someone so dear and close to your heart. There's one thing that can never be taken away and that's the memories and the times that were spent together, those are the ones that will never leave you.
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OMG! This piece is so sad and I am sorry for your loss. It must have been so difficult to go through and all. I know that it must be hard for you to cope, but I am curious as to how she died. Well, her love for you still shows within the words you weave. Congrats on the silver!
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=(
I always know something I am reading is significant when i get goosebumps.
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Touching
You have brought me to tears.
What a nice mellow build-up at the start of the work, which makes me anticipate a "happily ever after ending", which wasn't quite the case here.
Boy, how fate can change things in your life over here, especially separating you and your beloved.
Take heart, in the memories of sweeter days that you are sure you have had (Nothing is more certain than having been.) I share your loss.
With love and respect,
Aodes
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That is so beautiful and so sad at the same time. You are a very talented writer.
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wow, a really emotional write. I like the way you go through this poem with the right emotions, the first part is written through the eyes of an innocent child, growing up slowly. The air is light and happy, and when tragedy hits, the young man is robbed of innocence, and changed. I am really sorry for your loss, it is very hard to loose someone that means so much to you.
Anyway, i think this poem is a great tribute to this love. Well done.
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Heart reching poem. Love lost especially the first love you had. So sorry, this tale had to play out this way in the end. Not easy to forget your first love. Nicel tribute to her memory, I'm sure she is smiling down at you everytime someone new reads this poem. ~Sie
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this poem is amazing yet the saddess poem I have read! I would have never known this about you if I haven't read this poem. You once wrote on one of my poems that that poem of mine was the deepest poem that I have ever written and that was true. I believe that this piece is the deepest poem you have written and I applaud you because this has got to be the hardest thing to write about but can also cleanse out all the emotions and feelings you have. I just want to let you know I love this poem! You are a great writer and one day I might be as good as you. Hopefully in 7 years cause then I think I would be your age now! well I loved your poem and I'm here for you in any way I can be!
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No comment, just a sad heart. I don't know what happened but it was obviously not good
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Wow
This was incredible. I really dont have much to say, because like the other comments, im just speechless. Sometimes not saying anything is the best compliments a poet can recieve, and this was just amazing. your an amazing writer and an inspiration to many other writiers. awsome job...as usuall. from the heart and written with a lot of love. beautiful.
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OH!!! I am speechless!
Melodies without a brain in her head, here! 
You have written a fabulously telling poem that sends the reader over to knock her head on a wall! If I may do so, I am sending a big bucket filled with love and hugs and chocolate candy to you! The sweetest poem I ever read! 
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This was cute Daddy... I like it a lot... amazing job! It's so beautiful and amazing! Good luck! Rock on! xoxo Meg
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This was a very beautiful poem, and I almost cried while I was reading this wonderful piece. I'm sorry that she passed away , and thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem I appreciate. God Bless & Good Luck!!
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Wow
I am also in tears this is a beautiful piece in a sad kind of way. I have never found true love in my 41 years not with someone I have ended up with anyway. This piece really made me ponder the saying better to have loved and lost then to never have loved at all. I'm sure I will ponder that quite a bit more thinking about this piece. I was checking out your page I also have cats that I love very much and had to put my Ashes who was my baby for 16 years to sleep 3 years ago so I can relate to alot of what I saw. Thank you for sharing this piece . great job and love and light be with you my brother.
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a sad piece - life/fate is very cruel to us at times, giving us the world on a smiling plate then dropping the plate on the floor so we shatter with it. a good poem.
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Yeah 'merchure' should be 'mature' and 'scent' would read better as 'sent'. This was a sad piece, I'm sorry you lost her. This showed your love for her well. Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for your comment
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awwww!! im actually crying!!! no poem has ever done that before!!! awww sweetie!! *hugs* love always, samy xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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*in tears*
Awww hun...
It's sweet how you grew up to be playmates....then into something even deeper....I really liked reading this...
You had a few spelling errors...like in the beginning..."mature" and "scent" which I think should be "sent"....
Other than that honey...it was a very moving piece...
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