Leaves hang there
Brilliant greens
Slowly turning
With days of time
Into a dying brown
Clouds dashing and crawling
On their gray and blue
Route of existence
Wind flitting past
As if playing a child's game
Gusting fervently
On a billowing quest
Everything finding out
About their passing hours
Worrying they may be
Left behind
Years whirring by
Not slowing down
STOP
Frantic time WAIT
I have something to say
To the aging human over there
"Come into my loving arms."
Still you desperately need me
How I love you
I will never leave you.
Author notes
The image is a kissing disease plush toy.
(This poem is written from God's point of view. He promises to love us and to never leave us.)
A contest entry
- A Quickie by Hadji Murad.
600 points, ended May 25, 2007, 4 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful
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Interesting write, im not the viewer for god, im wicca, but still it had good causes, and was interesting. Charming write, i enjoyed it much.
Sincerely,
Deathwolf Tasagka
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Excellent
Wonderful expression for the prompt. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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this piece is very well written. it really hits home actually, as i have found myself losing faith lately due to my battles i am fighting. these words are spoken so loudly in this piece that all who have/are gone astray should read this piece. there is something inside me that still wants to believe, but each prayer that goes unanswered leaves me dying inside. thank you for sharing.
~bee
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I like this one! Life is too short to take a single breath for granted, and that really came through... This was an in-depth spiritual write, and a pleasure to read. Well done!
Love and light always,
Laura -
aww. seriously man, that was awesome. I love poems written from God's perspective.
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Wow this is such a beautiful and cool poem!! Easy flow and comforting imagery
Plushed toy hey 
why not!! It works at any age.. The idea of strength and hope envisioning being wrapped and hugged by a loved one and/or God is the kind of blanket as gentle as a comforter or a quilt. Nice to let go and be held. Regards. xx
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