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I miss you tonight

I’m lonely tonight

the trees rustle overhead

as the breeze

gently reminds

 me of your caress

your touch on my skin

 

 the weather report

said rain but

it’s only a pseudoscience

they’re never right

and the cowardly weatherman

hides behind the tv screen 

 

while you whisper to me

in our asylum

trembling as the wind howls

and my body relaxes

as it melds to your form

lying next to me

 

I cling to you

baring my soul, my body

and I wish you were here

instead of only

in my dreams

I miss you tonight

 

 

  dee garner

© may 24, 2007

 

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Option #3 Word bank: cowardly, skin, report, relaxes, baring, whispered, caress, pseudoscience, asylum, trembling

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  • Angelwatchingme
    September 1, 2007
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    This poem echoes throughout with longing. It is hard to not be with the one you love at any time. My hubby works at night on weekends, and I miss him, maybe it is because I am in my third trimester and fearful my water'll break and he'll not be able to make it home in time.


  • xX-Broken Up-Xx
    May 31, 2007
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    wow. so strong and powerful. keep writing!! ^-^


  • Sherry gold member
    May 27, 2007

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    Such longing and emotion in this captured in heartache you reflected this as if it was real Dee excellent.
    Love, Sherry


  • Wesley Storer
    May 25, 2007
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    Excellent

    We always feel young when it comes to romance. Lovely write!

  • Dixie
    May 25, 2007

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    You have turned these words into a song. A lovely
    poem, very moving.
    Good luck in this contest

    Dixie

  • pozo
    May 25, 2007

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    Good piece, I liked the description here. I found this piece quite romantic and it was a fairly good use of the wordbank.
    Pozo


  • leo2
    May 25, 2007

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    Certain recent events have made this poem strike close to home. I can feel the emptiness in your words. Best wishes in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • individuality gold member
    May 24, 2007

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    ah the rain, though it can be refreshing at times, it can also remind us of sorrowful ways, i say we should save up for a rainy day, then buy a crossbow and shoot the weatherman a good poem


  • catz Moderators member
    May 24, 2007
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    Dang... I can't get this to stay in verse form with breaks in between the verses. I'll keep trying... And, it wont let me change the font color..damn!!

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