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Thanatos, I Await Thy Embrace

Sweet release from a twisted reality
I fear you not, though others tremble before you
To them you are a horrid and terrifying fate
But to me you are a source of beauty and inspiration
Though the masses spend their lives fleeing you
I walk towards you with open arms

 

You are the final equalizer
The only surety in a life of chaos

You disregard race, creed, religion, and gender

In the end we shall all walk beside you

It is only a question of when

How soon shall we traverse the sunless lands?


There are those that pity the dead
Hate them and fear them
Despise them as reminders of their own mortality
Yet I say the dead are to be envied
For no longer must they endure
The pain and torments of the living
They are the fortunate ones
Lying in slumber eternal
Amidst the turmoil of the mortal realm

 


 

Author notes

Prompt V Option i

Death is a subject that I find very fascinating to talk about with other people. The reactions are so varied, from curiosity, to revulsion. It is something that I spend a lot of time thinking about, so I like to think I have a fairly good grasp on my opinions.

This marabout isn't untouchable

A contest entry

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Comments

  • Astrotriz
    May 26, 2007

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    Okay, I really don't like saying things like this because it all comes down to personal opinion, but you asked for honesty:

    I think this sounds like every other poem about death. But worse because the wording sounds a bit 'pretentious'; you wrote with a lot of overused, wannabe-Shakespearean [or whatever you want to call it] words and phrases-- "mortal realm", "chaos", "eternal slumber", "twisted reality", etc.

    I believe that you could have been a lot more creative with this, especially since you stated that you like to talk about this topic. I don't know you [probably], but I don't think you expressed yourself the way you'd probably have liked to. This is missing a lot that I would have expected from someone that claims to have a strong opinion on death.

    Thank you for your entry, however, and MANY thanks for following the rules. A ridiculous amount of people haven't and it's irritating. :/ Brownie points!