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Remember The Garden Of Eden

Put here many years ago,

      With one thing there to guide us,

      It let us well and from its gaze

      Nothing could ever hide us.

      At first we followed blindly,

      With unshaken trust,

      Yet as we grew we grew apart,

      And our faith of steel began to rust.

      This began with a simple tree,

      And an apple on its limb,

      In the middle of this Eden,

      The truth began to dim.

      Of its red, round, shining beauty,

      A single bite was taken.

      Then God appeared and revealed to them,

      How they were mistaken.

      Oh, how they cried and cried some more,

      For the forgiveness they thought they deserved.

      Yet in the end these shaken sinners,

      Were quite justly served.

      And it was then that they did see, with wide eyes,

      That the punishment for their sin was pain and sorrow.

      And this we see,

      Will go on through each marrow,

      So now we live,

      As God fades from our lives,

      And Hell grows,

      As there each unsaved sinner dives,

      Yet all thru this,

      God continues to lead,

      His love for us,

      Lasting through each sinners deed,

      Surely this love he has,

      Is something to admire,

      As even fewer and fewer angels,

      Soar to a world much higher.

      And when it all ends,

      The truth will be seen,

      All in stone will be set,

      Of which nothing can intervene.

      You have now been a story told,

      And now a warning I am giving,

      Live your life as you wish,

      But know for whom you’re living!!

Author notes

just remeber that all things will end eventually, and you should try to live a way that will enable ou to go to the one place you want to spend eternity.

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  • stavykm gold member
    March 20, 2008
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    Beautiful

    Oh so true the fallen man in the garden of Eden. This is an increadible poem. Yes it is truly a gift to receive the Lord. Thank you for sharing your love for the Lord with me and good luck in the contest.
    Much Love
    Many Blessings
    Kelle Marie
    stavykm


  • Talking Toni gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    Spot On!!!!!!!

    I love thr rhyming version of the garden of eden story.The fall of Adam and Eve giving inot the temptation of the serpent.Thanks for your rendition and good luck in the contest!!!~~Toni~~


  • Nam
    August 24, 2007
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    "Will go on through each marrow," - I think you are using "marrow" incorrectly. It has several definitions, one being ones bone (skeletal), it's also a part of squash, and it's meaning can also mean "the best thing" (as Shakespeare used it).

    I'm thinking you meant "tomorrow" so, if you did then "'morrow" is probably what you're looking for.


  • MissBumbleBee
    July 14, 2007

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    I love how this speaks to the reader!!and the rhyme is awesome..great story too best of luck in my contest!!
    and God Bless
    Casey


  • lauren nicole
    July 10, 2007

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    I actually liked this poem a lot. I liked that you kind of say that you should live your life however you want, but always keep in mind its where you go after your life that's truly important. Thank you for your entry. Keep writing, good luck, and God bless.

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