Help...
She goes in the bathroom,
She's smashing things off the wall,
Help...
She's going in the cupboard,
She's gonna do it again,
Help...
She has it in her hand,
She puts it to her wrist,
Help...
Blood drips from every inch,
It doesn't hurt she says..."it's just a pinch"
Help...
She feels that if she died she wouldn't be missed,
She still can't forget that kiss,
Help...
She falls on her knees,
Blood is dripping,
Help...
She lyes on her back wishing she wasn't breathing,
She reaches over for the bottle,
Help...
She thinks no one wants me... "why even fucking bother"
He doesn't want me... "we don't belong together"
Help...
She's speaking softer,
... She's not breathing ...
Help...
Pill bottles all over the floor,
Her moms knocks down the door,
Help...
She's too late,
She's gone,
Help...
Her mom walks up the aisle,
She watches them close her casket,
Help...
Her heart just stops beating,
She can't let go,
Help...
She pulls out a gun,
She puts her finger on the trigger,
Help...
She lets it go,
She falls to the ground,
Help...
She's gone,
... SHE RISKED EVERYTHING TO BE WITH HER DAUGHTER ...
Her hope,
Her goals,
Her dreams...
Her love.
Please tell me what you think
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A very dark and sad poem reflecting in truth a depressive state that many people get into and the cry for help is many times given but never seen till things either get out of hand or ar to late to do anything about. So many people are lost to these feelings yet all they really needed was comfort and a listening ear. The poem holds a strong message to its readers (HM)
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Tragic. :/ I think the HELP is the perfect little addition to this poem. Really though, it just makes the whole thing more touching and real and fasinating. I really liked it. A lot of that stuff is actually going on and it's so horrible. I know so many people who've done that to themselves..the cutting and I can't imagine the strength the people have to do that...it just doesn't seem real. I hope you don't do it or anything, and if you do just talk to me or something because it's so sad, that stuff=/
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Wow this is amazing to the max! It kept me on the edge of my seat through the whole reading. It had great imagery. I could relate to it but in different ways. Fantastic job!
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Wow, the imagery in this is so powerful. It really held my attention. I didn't even notice the length of this. Great job.
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An extremely powerfull write! The hurt, the pain, the emotion, all so strong! And the imagery, leaving no space for any romantic notion.. Suicide at it's cruellest.. A Brilliant write..
My Respect
Love
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