Been without food for quite a spell
Seen things that remind one of hell
I've battled the demons got scars to prove it
This war in my head, I thought I'd lose it
I've seen the souls with their feet a-blazing
Seen Satan's face, grotesque... yet amazing
Seen an angel alight on my right side
Beelzebub no longer saw reason to hide
They sparred over possession of my eternal soul
After my life of sex, drugs, and Rock-n-Roll
They told me I had a decision to make
My salvation was what was at stake
They thought this was a good time to ask
I confronted them with the impossibility of this task
I told them my soul was not for the taking
They said I was lying, cheating, faking
Nobody can keep his own strings to life
They were there only for Atropos to knife
I told them I was an exception to that fact
I won my Ha from God in Blackjack
He tried to get me drunk but I fooled him
I won a little more in Texas Hold-em
Then along came the Morning Star to test his luck
Drank too much and called me a schmuck
I knifed him when God wasn't looking
Then we got some heavenly cooking
We ate and partied in Olympus' rooms
Wow, those were some pretty good 'shrooms
Author notes
Figured I'd let people know that "Ha" is the Hawaiian term for "The Breath of Life", the feet a-blazing is from Dante and Atropos is the Greek fate who cut the strings to life.
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I love it.
Nice. Really nice. A little dark for my taste, but I guess the world isn't all comedy. Wow, the only Hawaiian word I know is "aloha" so I learned something new. This is a great poem. I really felt like I was there experiencing this stuff. Cant wait to read more.
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I know some Amandas who suck, so no, it does not make you cool... I liked this poem. It made me smile and it's better than most of the others I've read. Good job. The only thing I'd say is that you could make it easier on the eyes by breaking it up into stanzas and choose a background that goes with the tone of the poem. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Thanks for giving me the ideas. The only thing I must say about the background is I was on a computer that wouldn't let me change the background. The last bunch of poems all have the default background
Thanks a lot though.
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