Remembrance
Portentous, anamnesis,
Beginning, lying, decorating,
Echoes ,repeat, sentry, bowing
Creating, designing, painting,
Adorned, embellished,
Significant
Author notes
Diamente Form:
Line 1: Noun or subject
Line 2: Two Adjectives describing the first noun/subect
Line 3: Three -ing words describing the first noun/subect
Line 4: Four words: two about the first noun/subect, two about the antonym/synonym
Line 5: Three -ing words about the antonym/synonym
Line 6: Two adjectives describing the antonym/synonym
Line 7: Antonym/synonym for the subject
A contest entry
- Seven Lines by Lj-.
300 points, ended May 27, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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(There are sort of eight lines, I'm looking for seven...)
This is good. Kind of mysterious.
Thank you for your entry,
Best of luck!
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Thank u
I was having problems with the marginal lines, and was throwing my lines off. Thank u for pointing that to me. Saddie23 -
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No problem
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snaps for the effort.
Acctuly.. I dont know. What is it? I looked at the contest && im still baffeld. I must be dumb.
Anyway. What ever it is, im sure it is greatness.
Mucho greatness
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bravo poet
[X]GTxx
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Thank u
The contest is seven lines and a diamente form is seven lines. I tried to make sense of this, but seems to be off. Thank u for critique and the applaudes. Saddie23
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its simple, and yet very complext. awesome.
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thank u
I'm glad u liked my poem. Thank u for the applaudes and the critiques. Saddie23
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I will give you credit for trying, but some of those words just didn't seem like they fit. Plus, it seems you completely ignored the rule set forth for the 4th line. It also mentions "the antonym/synonym" which I don't see any of the fore-mentioned rules calling for any antonyms, so... pointless word?
It was decent, but needs improvement. The idea behind it was commendable though. Thanks for the submission.
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thank you
My daughter took class on diamente and taught me the right way to write an diamente form. Can u take another look and see if have done it ritht. Saddie23 -
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I really had only looked at the layout that was included in the author notes. Two web site I found to help out a bit more are:
http://teams.lacoe.edu/documentation/classrooms/amy/algebra/5-6/activities/poetry/diamante.html
http://www.boobis.com/students/poetry/diamante.html
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Unique
Well done. It is short and to the point. I appreciate the author's notes explaining the style of writing. Thank you for sharing.
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awesome
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Unique and Spectacular!!
My first impreesion about this poem was that this is quite unique. The words used are brilliant and the style of writing is very unusual.
Great write!!
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skydancer205
nice job
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Not sure I adore this form you use here, but think we as poets whould always try new forms and styles when given the opporunity. Do not like all those ing words in a poem either, but give you credit for attempting such an unusual form, Do not think I have read one of these for a long time. Kudos for attempting such an unusual form.
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Very nice write. I actually understand it cause sometimes it's hard for me to understand these kind of writes. Keep it up!
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It's okay. I know that you worked with a specific form and, of course, the topic is something that could really be evocative, but this was bland and contrived. Still, not you, 'twas the form. I'd love to see what you could do with the memorial idea sans this set structure. Some of your word choices seem false, too (and should "embellish" be "embellished"?).
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Excellent
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I'm sorry I did not already applaud you on this!
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This is great, and so poignant. Keep penning, I think this is really good.
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Great Job!
I like this poem, you did a great job on this. Thank you for sharing!
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Very good job! Liked that you explained in your notes also. Good going
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