I sat alone in front of the fountain
I heard a russel in the bush
I turned my head quickly to see what was there
I suddenly felt a push
I leaped up and ran over to the sound
You sat under a tree
"Hello. I need to tell you something."
You said to me
You took my hand and stood up
You walked me over to the fountain
You pointed up into the sky
I could see the mountains
You whispered gently into my ear
And we leaned in to kiss
Nothing but a small peck
But it was pure bliss
You suddenly let go of my neck
And I had a confused face
You leaned in again, with more passion
It was magic, majectic, moving
I felt as if I was floating up to space
You let go again and back away
You let go of my hand as if it were fate
You walked away and waved behind
"I'll be back, you just wait."
Author notes
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Comments
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this is an awesome poem, great detail. good job.
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Very good! I saw this as a moving picture, & u have written this very well. Only if u look at line 22, I think if u put 'ed' on 'back' it would be a bit better. Just saying what I would change. The entire thing was awesome! Keep up the great work in ur poems. Good luck in my contest.
P.S. Plz do not respond 2 my comment
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