Yeah, they teased each other all the time.
He thought she wanted him
She wondered If she would begin
The times together were good and better
He made her laugh she got wetter
Maybe she thought I have a special one
His day dream she could have his sun
Time is the tester of all things
Seasons come and go reasons bring
New ideas from spring to spring
Love has a way to make sad hearts sing
One day they were all alone
The heat of passion the fire zone
He should have listened when she said no
The juices had force too strong they flowed
He broke and entered her body
Violated her temple humiliated her sanctuary
The pain of manhandled trust
Destroyed the Love and it was Lost
Inside she screams how I can heal
What manner of forgiveness
What kind of deal
Raped and used by a good friend
He cried inside thinking it was the bitter end
Time heals all wounds but they leave scars the wise say
Hurricanes all kinds of storms and better days
Repair through meditation and prayer
Our Friend is God always there
Lesson #6 show the equality from Heaven
Prince Husayn saying forgive and learn from this hard lesson.
Namaste
A contest entry
- friendship and rape - dedication to my friend. by petrichor.
700 points, ended June 2, 2007, 16 entries
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Comments
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Great write. I felt you could've used some punctuation marks in some places so that the poem would have been more easily understood & read. Without proper punctuation, some parts of this poem just throw me off as to what you're trying to say. But besides that, great job. And remember, you don't always have to rhyme. Sometimes when a person attempts to make everything rhyme, it just sounds forced. Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for the critique and i will take very seriously what you say about punctuations. Namaste.
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