Two old worn tattered flags
Two triangular shaped ones too,
These sit on my closet shelves
The three colors, red, white, and blue
These treasured flags belonged to my dad and grandpa
Grandpa did his time in World War Two,
The most patriotic man I've ever known
He would weep when he saw red, white, and blue
I'm so glad they are living in heaven
They don't have to fret what to do,
Will never again have to leave their wife and children
To fight for their proud red, white, and blue
My father also fought the fight
The Air Force was what he chose to do,
So this Iraq thing shall also haunt me
As I gaze at three colors, red, white, and blue
Author notes
I'm thinking of maybe rewriting this one. I have so much more to add. written 2/5/2003
POETDONTKNOWIT
Please tell me what you think
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The flag
The flag of our fathers is no different then the one for our sons. The sad state of affairs is that we, those that judge, have become different. We live easy because of the brave that bear arms and believe. I wonder what our fathers & gradfathers would think now -
Very well done
I too have a very patriotic nature. I believe we all should. I have shed a few tears over ours nations songs. This was very touching and meaningful poem.
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I Salute Your .......................
Family of service to our country!! I wouldn't change anything about this as it is your tribute of sort to the men in your family who offered up services to keep us safe and free. You havr alot to be proud of in your family. I wrote a tribute of sorts called "Because of you" you may enjoy it if you like to take a ead. This was great and full of pride and I thank you for sharing it with me this morning!!!~~Toni~~
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This poem speaks of pride and patriotism and honour and I have to say I like it and even though I am not American I honour the Red,Blue and White flag...you should check out my poems Our American Flag and Real American Hero on my page.
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I love the meaning and emotion behind this piece. It is clear and profound and wonderfully thoughtful. The only quarrel I have is that it doesn't automatically flow in my mind, I had to read a few lines twice to find the right rythm. the wording was exceptional.
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Am no poet and boy do I know it
I say that you said you were thinking about rewrite and when I read through the second time after you said a may be rewrite - something jumped out at me. It is the last two stanzas have do to rhyme with blue. May be that is what makes you think rewrite? May be something like in the third stanza here is a thought to play around with may be?
I'm so glad they are living in heaven
They have already have their due
Then it would be the same sounds but not the same word?
You will know what is best...love the three colors, red, white, and blue
OK on the fourth read through you could may be even eliminate do and put pursue...the Air Force was what he chose to pursue..
I read that you have written so many poems and so will so enjoy reading as many as I can. I hope you don't mind my suggestions...when you said may be a rewrite I thought you might be open to an oldish woman's after 3 am slants.
Love it...looked at the other site you post at and will enjoy trying that site out too.
Penquinpoet
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moving
perfect poem. plus the repetition of red white and blue is a poetry device well used, it reinforced and tied the theme for me. i enjoy reading your works -
So nice
It is a pleasure to read these words. When so many seem to forget the sacrifice of those the brave. I have written some poetry about those the brave & this is wonderful
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Wow. Beautiful. Captivating. Brillant imagery. You know what your doing
Such a creative piece.
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patriotic. beautiful. gorgeous in manner and serious in tone. thoroughly enjoyed. gonna have to check out some of your other writes.
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This is a beautiful poem. It's brave fighting for your own country! I respect those people a lot.
Keep writing and God Bless
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What a beautiful dedication to your loved ones who bravely fought for the red, white,and blue. Amazing piece. I salute you for it!
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Exceptional work
There's a lot of thinking in this one going on, the there's much to reminisce over which to be quite honest, brings back mine, some words in here to make a tear or two, that's for sure, and it seems prevailing that the time depicted was even outreached of the ones you hoped,
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Good thoughts. I really look up to people that have enough courage to fight for their country.
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FOLLOW YOUR HEART
let him lead the way
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this is really good i have a cousin who's in the air force and so yah any ways great rite i like this alot
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I just had to come and read it again. I love it, Keep penning from the heart.
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it is excellent it reminds us of all our loved ones that are over fighting for our country. I have a nephew and my father fought in vietnam. I also just lost a brother in law that was in desert storm years ago. I think it would be wonderful extended, but It is great the way it is.
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Yes, this would be nice if extended. I can tell that it has a lot more waiting to be added to it... Let me know when you add the rest
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