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Give Up?

Lost
In a world unknown
Fall
Into dark
Scraped and bruised
Don't make a sound
Is it time
To die now?
To give up
Not try
To stop the tears
Behind these eyes
Not listen
To all these lies
Leave everyone behind
Just like
They left you
Is it time
To not fight
To just give up
On this life?

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Just how I'm feeling...

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  • Moonlightrevelations
    May 30, 2007

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    Soooo good!!

    This is just marvelous writing Ash! It's beautiful. :] My favorite part is:
    Fall
    Into dark
    Scraped and bruised
    Don't make a sound
    Is it time
    To die now?

    It just flows so smoothly :]]


  • Fixing Tomorrow
    May 24, 2007
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    This flows really well. I'm sorry you feel this way, but no you wouldn't give up on life.