It was raining,
cold, hard, and wet,
soaking us to the bone.
The mad dash
inside, our giggling
echoing against the walls.
We hung our
clothes on the
floorboards, in crumpled piles.
Pushing and tasting
everything we
always wanted.
The hours went by
like honey dripping
slow and sweet.
Funny how innocence
clings in the air
long after it is lost.
Author notes
For some reason Spring/Summer reminds me of innocence and the loss of it. There seems to be a strange beauty in this idea, at least to me.
A contest entry
- AllPoetry New Members Contest May 2007 by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended June 6, 2007, 71 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like the way your poem flows. It really does give a person the feel of moving from Spring to Summer.It paints a tasteful picture that is very vivid. I like the way it relys on memories. That was a nice touch for me.
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Thanks for entering
Nature and seasons truly do have a way of influencing how we feel sometimes. Nicely written poem. I also like the imagery you have used in this piece.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY !
Ahh some very beautiful imagery in this. I also love your last stanza. Thanks so muchfor entering our contest.
Gaylene
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Thanks for your entry
Yes I like the idea of that. What you had to say in your author comments does fit somehow. I like the last stanza in particular. Thanks for the read
Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thanks for Entering!
It was Winter when I did, and yet it could almost have been summer! I think it's just the sticky weather and how uncomfortable we get that is the reminder, hahaha!
Well done and thanks for something different
Thanks for entering and good luck
Faerie - Site Greeter
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Lovely imagery and theme, I could just taste the sweetness of the innocence along with the honey. Nice work! Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to AllpoetryDove
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Thank you for entering
I can understand the tie you have chosen here of the seasons Spring/Summer and the loss of innocence, almost akin to the season passing away having shed its beauty. Something precious is always beautiful.
Well done and thank you for entering
Since the month of May is during the Spring season, I take it that is the tie for the contest.
~Katie~
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