Hes been living on the edge and we all know It's no good.
Hes been living on the edge not doing what he should.
Hes been living on the edge and now we all will pay the price,
no longer can he fool around Its time to roll the dice.
Hes been living on the edge and now he'll suffer the consequence
as we sit around waiting for him our bodies become tense.
Hes been living on the edge but tonight was his last night.
for our brother our son our dearest friend its time to take your flight.
A contest entry
- Funky Titles by Morrigan Trinity.
450 points, ended June 10, 2007, 24 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Lkee :) ?
Comments
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Wow. This poem seems to hold so much emotion. It's all that I hoped for when making this contest. Thank you for entering. Luck!
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Nicely Done
suspenseful poem that can mean anything depending on the reader's imagination... I like that - leaving the reader to interpret the way she/he wants to.. short & cute poem that shows your unique style of writing... the repetition is not forced but flows very well in the poem... Let your talent flourish and reach for the skies... take care Minoo
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this poem has suspense, and great flow. you did a good job on it.
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