Womb of unborn eternities
Ponderous, rayless onyx
Shoreless voracity
Feeding
On fallen moons
Scavenged suns
Shattered stars
Ultimately
Stretched
Inexorably contracting
Heaving
Twisting, straining
Explosive expulsion
Fledgling
Starfish-armed
Galaxy
Author notes
contemplating Black Holes
A contest entry
- Title Creativity 2 by Celticmoon.
525 points, ended June 4, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For the Abstract by Chelsea Void.
320 points, ended June 16, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What's Within a Black Hole? by aslanlight.
600 points, ended December 30, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is absolutely stunning; in fact it's so excellent I'll overlook the fact that you haven't said what you think's within a Black Hole! lol
Peace Georgia
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Thank you, Georgia, for you comment and clappies! I was considering that Black Holes might be doing all that feeding, not in gluttony, but creation. Where do galaxies come from? Perhaps Black Holes are the wombs of the universe?
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This is fantastic!!
I'm not surprised you won a bronze with this. I've read a lot about black holes, so this really has a great deal of impact on me. I really enjoyed how you described star-fish arms, to pull anything and everything into it. "Stretched" was a perfect word to use within this poem. I love the creative direction you took in this contest, by writing it as an astral journey through the unknown.
This is my favorite stanza
"Womb of unborn eternities
Ponderous, rayless onyx
Shoreless voracity"
Bravo!!!
Don
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Thank you, Knight70, for taking the time to read and comment! There's so much open to the imagination in the mysteries and beauties of space!
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beautiful. this was very, very different but very intriguing. i was wondering what you were talking about, i had an idea, but was clarified in your notes. great subject matter. my favorite stanza: Feeding
On fallen moons
Scavenged suns
Shattered stars
the idea that black holes feed on the listed elements... just great imagery choice. fabulous. -
You have penned what I would consider to be a very abstract piece on the subject of black holes. You have taken your issued title and ran with it in a direction I myself would never have thought of. Truly creative piece you have here. Thanks for entering and good luck!
Blessings
Bel
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