My life is like a roller coaster ride; I am up when you are up, and down when you are down, but think I now need to lead my own life, so will let you go.
A contest entry
- The Power Of Compression. by electric supernova.
600 points, ended June 28, 2007, 42 entries
Honorable mention
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I really like the reference to the roller coast in the first line, it graps your attention and sets the pace. Great job on this piece and good luck to you.
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wow x short but all thats needed i think x very good work and well put
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Holy Calzone!
Excellent, and such description in ONLY ONE LINE. It kind of describes my life with my boyfriend right now... so it makes me feel so...like...wow.
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Ah, a recent feeling I've discovered, that of being found wanting. I hate it.
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It is hard to do but you need to live your own life and let go of all the negative people in the world. It is time to get off the emotional roller coaster.
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How true that one must lead one's own life and well put in a way that makes one stop and think. Much meaning in so few words. Good Luck in the contest and all the best!~
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You need to fix a couple of words, like the second life should be 'like' and you're missing a couple of 'I's in the sentence, but it's still really lovely! Realising that we need to live our own lives is a incredible thing, and this sentence really portrays that. Best of luck to you!
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