Within my heart’s abode, a mine is found
Inside this refuge, bliss and joy abound
Right from this source, rich blessings are bestowed
A mine is found within my heart’s abode
This mine contains the treasure of pure peace
And rubies of true love are sure to please
Within heart’s soil were sown compassion’s grains
The treasure of pure peace, this mine contains
Just gaze within, your heart is much like mine
In Oneness let our energies entwine
Embrace the peace of mind you’re sure to win
Your heart is much like mine, just gaze within
Through meditation search for your true core
In freedom’s space your spirit soon will soar
Author notes
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A contest entry
- AE Swap Sonnet contest! 1000 points to winner! by PerVirtuous Allan.
1350 points, ended June 1, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very lovely indeed. I agree with words spoken before me, congrates on the gold..rock on.
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Yay!
Congratulations on your gold Marion! These are beautiful thoughts and the form works wonderfully with them. -
This is lovely! You mastered the form well. Flow is perfect, meter on target and the image is vividly beautiful.
Love,
Amera ♥
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merci beaucoup pour la trophee d'or, chère amera ...
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ah, you mean the morph ... it was a gift from cyberartist ... but today I just bought a software with which to create morphs ... did you see laura's ?
maa
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Looks good to me. Meter and flow are perfect and content is good. Thanks for entering.
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thank you again so much for the gold trophy ...
what a generous gift ...
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You earned it. It wasn't a gift.
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Just beautiful and so full of heart and spirit, just lovely and inspirational and you seem to have the form so well and working beautifully within this, it flows so gently and I wish you good luck in the contest and all the best~!
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Hi!
This is so beautiful, I love the message and I think the swapped lines flowed very well in this sonnet, effortlessly, a wonder poem
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Amazing
WOW! How fantastic is that! One would be hard-pressed to locate another poem so impeccably crafted and brimming with such truth and beauty. Simply splendid!
Best of luck in the contest.
All the best,
David Michaels
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This is my favorite topic, and you have written beautifully about it. The phrase "rubies of true love" is pleasing! Stanza 2 could be better; the other stanzas have good iambic meter. Best of luck, sweets!
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Good, it didn't seem to flow quite as well as I think you could have done, but it is still pretty good...
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