Deep within I hide
An evil feeling tries to rise
Above the darkest night
Where the bats fly
A blood filled gruesome sight.
Each dagger thrown
Each evil look
Each blood filled thirsty grin
Within I hide
Knowing you won't win.
You force your power
On the depths of my soul
Anger creeping upwards
Your plight, your fight, your goal.
Inside a coffin
Alone at night
Burying deep
Hammering the nails
I cannot hear a peep.
Smashing your head in pieces
Blood splatters vast
Each bone is ripped
Each joint is torn
There's no-one there to morn.
If only it were easier
I know I have to fight
Each tiny grin
Each viscious look
I'm the one who'll win.
A contest entry
- Show Me your darker side by DemonChild.
1200 points, ended May 30, 2007, 37 entries
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Interesting
The ending which is the title of the poem doesnt make an impact on me. However there was a place in this poem that I got lost in the journey. i love "your plight,your fight,your goal" something in that awakened me. I wanted to lose myself in the gruesome thoughts yet teh poem seemed a bit disjointed. Kisses;-) -
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You've completely missed the point of this poem and completely misunderstood this poem which has a simple to understand meaning. Maybe you've never been mad at someone to the point in which you wished they'd disappear. Maybe you've never experienced the pain of being bullied by someone and wishing that you could get rid of them and knowing that you cannot. Take all the anger you feel at that person and try to write a poem and this is what you've got. Your comments dissapoint me well at least your the only one who didn't understand this poem which says something.
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that really is dark! Lots of blood, Mickie. Good job!
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Creative... I wonder if this is directed at a single person or society as a whole?
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