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You're Still Very Much A Part Of Me



As I look up to Heaven on this cool summer night,
there is something that I want you to know.
Even though we’re worlds apart,
my love for you continues to grow.

If I had never met you I would probably be,
a lost soul searching for my destiny.
I would have no idea of where I am from,
I would not even know my name.

I was a wanderer on a road that never ended,
I never knew what peace really was.
My heart trembled in fear and pain,
deep down inside I was so lost.

I never knew how to express myself,
or how and when to smile.
All I had was the shirt on my back,
and a bag that I carried for many miles.

I walked for years without direction,
taking paths I had never known.
Following a star shooting across the earth,
I thought that I would always be alone.

Through deserts and mountaintops,
forests filled with trees and life.
Through caves and deep canyons,
every day and night cut me like a knife.

Then one day I walked down a busy street and saw you,
a beautiful girl with a map.
I thought that it was interesting so I approached you,
and I asked you what you did with that.

You told me that each object stood for something,
and every single road led to another place.
You said, “You could follow it forever.”
You could imagine the look upon my face.

I told you that that was my life,
I never stopped walking until that day.
I told you about all of my adventures,
and how I just let fate lead the way.

It led me to a precious treasure,
one I could never trade or sell.
It gave me peace and understanding,
and with you in love I fell.

You taught me how to settle down,
showed me how to love and be kind.
You opened up parts of me I never knew existed,
even in the darkest parts of my heart and mind.

You were the greatest friend I ever had,
the joy I always needed in my life.
You were more than a woman to me,
you were my first love and wife.

We traveled the world together,
we saw things we had never seen before.
We sang sweet songs of love and the like,
you were everything that I have ever lived for.

We promised each other that we would always be,
together until the end of time.
In my heart you still live on,
you’re always here with me in my heart and mind.

Until the day that we are one again,
I will be right here where I have always been.
Until our hearts are reunited in Heaven,
I will long for our love to begin again.

I will continue to love and miss you,
from now and for eternity.
Wherever you are you still have my heart,
you’re still very much a part of me.

 

 

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  • babyseal
    November 24
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    wow, im amazed. like more amazed then i ever am. goodluck in the contest. talented and touching

  • Wow, and here I thought you couldn't rhyme lol. This is the most loving piece I have ever read, and yet quite sad. Absolutely stellar, as you continue to amaze me with your writes.

    My favorite stanza-

    We traveled the world together,
    we saw things we had never seen before.
    We sang sweet songs of love and the like,
    you were everything that I have ever lived for.

    You rank as one of my top favorites because your writes always make a reader feel. Wonderful job. Thank you so much for sharing.


  • Ami
    September 2

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    This is a sweet love poem I really liked it congrats on the silver and bronze trophies that you have so far for this
    Thank you so much for entering my contest and Good luck
    -♥Amy♥


  • trekkergirl
    July 14

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    Thank you for taking me along on this journey... a journey through life and experiences. It is a wonderfully written poem. THanks for sharing his with us and thanks for entering it into this contest.


  • Threnoidia
    June 23

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    i love how in the beggining, i totally pictured a guy walking around alone, but not alone in the world, almost envious but w/ not to much degree of the groups of people he saw. oh and then the girl having a map, being symbolic for her giving him a sense of direction in life instead of just wandering aimlessly. great rite. good chance in the contest


  • Dragonbabyx3
    April 10

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    This is beautiful, I absolutely loved this, although this broke my heart! a beautiful piece of work! thanks for sending this one my way


  • Sunkissed xo
    November 14, 2008

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    What an exquisite write. It moved my heart and soul with its stunning descriptions and beautiful tone. It expressed a sense of loss and sorrow, especially towards the end which was most touching and poignant. I am sorry for your loss
    I especially liked the lines "Following a star shooting across the earth", and "you were everything that I have ever lived for". Well done, and my condolences to you. take care

    peace xxx

  • poets whisper silver member
    November 10, 2008

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    Congratulations on the trophies. This is a bit long for my taste because my attention span is not all that great. It is very romantic though and I can imagine how happy someone would be to recieve it ... even though it is for goodbye. thank you for entering

  • davidwright silver member
    October 23, 2008
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    Inspiring but sad as well. A good entry thank you for being a contestant and happy trails


  • januaryrain gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    Well I need a tissue. I am so sorry for your loss.
    It's a beautiful poem, filled with emotion. Good luck in the contest.


  • peregrin
    September 27, 2008

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    How tragic, but so fantastic too. This is a great write, and how I wish it wasn't something people could honestly relate to. Great job!!!


  • my1lovewearsdiapers
    March 3, 2008

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    This is a beautifull piece. The message is wonderful and it is well written. Thank you for the entry ~T~


  • my1lovewearsdiapers
    February 18, 2008
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    you are missing items from your authors notes you need your username and "i'm a monkey with purple hair"


  • bananasfoster42
    January 10, 2008
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    this is absolutely amazing. thanks for the entry!


  • SilverRain
    November 8, 2007
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    Very great poem, filled with emotions! I loved it! Best of luck to you!


  • Darianna
    October 21, 2007

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    Isn't it great that families can be together forever and that we don't have to actually lose that beloved person once they are "gone"? It's that thought and faith that keeps me going Hugs for you my dear friend!

    Dari xxx


  • Epilogue
    October 9, 2007
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    It is always so hard to lose someone you love. Just stay strong and hopeful and things will get better with time~ even if it doesn't seem like it now. I am glad to see you are still hopeful though you are in pain. If you ever need anyone to talk to~ I'm here.
    ~elizabeth~


  • stavykm gold member
    August 30, 2007
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    I love the Title

    Thank you for entering my contest. I closed it early for I had 10 entries quickly. It was very difficult to judge and yours is a great write. I loved the title and 1st and last line for the tied together so well. I hope to see you in future contests!!! This was my first contest and I hope to see you in future ones. Maybe you'll get to read some of my poetry!!!!!! Oh I already commented below, thanks again.


  • stavykm gold member
    August 30, 2007

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    Sad and Hopeful

    Excellent write. This is what I was looking for in my contest. Great reading I loved it. Great write!!!


  • LadysDragon
    August 10, 2007
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    Happy/Sad

    So happy,and then sad.It reminds me of my uncle Robert.Thank you and good luck!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 31, 2007

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    Nice,

    You always weave you heart perfectly, and I hope you know that you have a fan in me. Keep up the great detailed pieces bro, peace, Timothy~


  • aeolia
    July 22, 2007

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    Well-written. It's slightly emotional in a distant way, which leaves me wondering. I'm not a fan of rhyme, but it was done decently here, and wasn't forced at all. Good luck in my contest!


  • MeaningfulPoet482
    July 17, 2007
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    This one brought tears to my eyes. Good job!!!


  • Dlvvanzor
    June 13, 2007

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    That's so sweet and sad. A lot of emotion shows through this poem. You've done a great job expressing this.

    Thank you for entering my contest,
    -Dlvvanzor


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    May 24, 2007
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    dang i keep doing that **looks around hopes noone seen that


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    May 24, 2007

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    **tear** This was a very loving piece. Took my breath away. I felt the love in this and the loss in this. SO the imagery did what it was suppose to. I love you. **xooxoxoxoxoxox** always.
    Vicky

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