I seek solace
from the evil (if I may call it so)
that surrounds me
in my solitude.
Catching phrases
from the dead.
If only it were so easy
to pass through
and die
unhampered
by foul memory.
Are you late?
The worms will wait.
the little one is asleep,
she says,
blonde and blue-eyed sleeping
so she says
rushing away
to rough hands
grasping in the dark:
'so white, so soft, so sweet.'
and just so
I would love
were I not empty.
It is dark out here.
Are you late?
The worms will wait.
sleep innocence
for six-pence
or a little more
she will leave you
sweet innocence
asleep.
Are you late?
The worms will wait.
but where is the madness?
when will she weep
as Jorden sleeps?
Where are the angels
as Jorden sleeps?
Are you late?
The worms will wait.
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Written August 1st, 2003
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Wonder why this poem, today. Those are the kind of things I often wonder. Jorden is a pretty name. I like Jordan because of the River.
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Awww, oh so sad and sweet. I like to know more about Jordan? She (I assume it is a she) sounds so young.
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Woah. That's certainly a mouthful you said. I like it though!
There's something about the weaving of your words that soft and drifty. Sounds like Jordan is a child and I don't know if the child is the one sick or dying, or the person looking over them. If it's the person looking over them then I would say that this is a suicide poem! Wow. What a way to go about writing one. Lestways, that's how I was reading into this one. I think that you did a good job of expressing yourself here. So thanks for featuring it so that we all had a chance to share your words and feelings with you!
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Great!
Great write!!I liked how you repeated:
"Are you late?
The worms will wait"
Good job!I would totally give you an applause, but I'm all out today
Just pretend I gave you one and I'll be sure to give this applause the next time i use my computer.
Very nice work.
Brittany
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Beyond..beyond...
WOW! This is was a paragon of dark, excellent poetry. You have my eternal applause. It was a piece that screamed out "I AM AWESOME". At first, I was thinking it was a personal piece "for Jorden" but I read it and I was totally blown away. This was a piece worth displaying, and every applause you get is well-earned, my friend. A pity I can only applaud once. You'll just have to imagine that I have put down five. -
I like the sue of style and it is well done. I love the way it is more than just a thought. It uses great elements of poetry.
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Enigmatic and dark!
This poem has an alluring tragic feel to it, without it really becoming clear why. I like that a lot! leave the reader enough room to fill it in with their own interpretation.
I love:
"and just so
I would love
were I not empty"
Well written!
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wonderful
liked this part:"Are you late?
The worms will wait" keep up the gr8 work -
great job
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Ok who is dead or who is dieing? This is a wonderful flowing well worded piece it seems very dark to me as if someone has died or is dying anyways good write!
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This is a great write very frightning but very clear it is brilliant and I hope it gets the regognition it merits, sometimes there is a little justice,well thought out it is a clever write as well as an artistic one, it was a pleasure to read a classy poem, keep writing you have a rare talent, I will be keeping an eye out for more of your work, keep penning my friend great work
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(Am confused by the catagory selection (Childrens, love, adult))
I have to read your poems a few times, as they are deep and words play with one another darting about, begging for understanding but also a little elusive - don't get me wrong, thats what makes good poetry....
The first stanza is great (if I may call it so) this really got me, your knowing but now wanting to know - your self doubt even though you know...evil is what is but shhh, don't let it know...
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Wow, it's very cool. "The worms will wait" refrain is like a darker Alice in Wonderland. It's a little frantic, a little hopeful. Nice one.
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Jorden or Jordan?
This is the only solace I know "The light shines in the darkness, and the dark can not comprehend it"...and the gentle warning of Light...take care that the light within you is not darkness" In waking or sleep, in madness or lucidity...she hears the angels weep and so she weeps....That's why.
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